for Thought Filter7/14/2013 c14 Dreaminglight
At the beginning of the story, Josh was fairly O.K. Now... He's turned into a piece of S***!
Punching a girl what kind of normal guy does that?!
At the beginning of the story, Josh was fairly O.K. Now... He's turned into a piece of S***!
Punching a girl what kind of normal guy does that?!
7/14/2013 c10 Dreaminglight
I can't believe what Aden and Jeanna did to Leigh they are such assholes! How can they? I now know what Leigh went through and understand why she acted like that everytime she though of Aden. Before I though it was nothing bad and she was too dramatic about it but no she wasn't at all. Her ex and bestie were real hypocrites
I can't believe what Aden and Jeanna did to Leigh they are such assholes! How can they? I now know what Leigh went through and understand why she acted like that everytime she though of Aden. Before I though it was nothing bad and she was too dramatic about it but no she wasn't at all. Her ex and bestie were real hypocrites
7/14/2013 c15 RubyRed22
YOU'RE ALIVE.
Your story makes me irrationally happy. This is not healthy, considering it has to end sometime. The whole time I was reading this, I kept glancing to the scroll bar at the side of the page thinking, "DAMN IT, I'M GETTING CLOSER TO THE END! NONONONONO."
So...I'm just realizing now...that Josh is a real dick.
And so is Jeanna if there's a more feminine way of expressing that. Underneath her sugar and spice, shallow bitch exterior is - I suspect - evil and spice and more evil, shallow bitch interior. The way you place the flashbacks makes it that much more interesting because the reader looks at it in a perspective of someone who already knows what happens next. Then you start to go, "Ohhh, so that's why her last name is Leigh!" or "That's what she meant when she said it was the cheer she never got to perform..." :/ Aden's a dick too. Douchery must run in the family because that was cold. Poor Leigh gets this shit thrown at her to otherwise stain her glamourous-turned-not-so-glamourous life. Now that I say it doesn't sound so tragic. Honestly though, that made me sad, how that last flashback went down. I feel bad because she held her pride, but missed out on something she genuinely wanted to do. Well, "wanted" is subjective, but generally, yeah.
YOU'RE ALIVE.
Your story makes me irrationally happy. This is not healthy, considering it has to end sometime. The whole time I was reading this, I kept glancing to the scroll bar at the side of the page thinking, "DAMN IT, I'M GETTING CLOSER TO THE END! NONONONONO."
So...I'm just realizing now...that Josh is a real dick.
And so is Jeanna if there's a more feminine way of expressing that. Underneath her sugar and spice, shallow bitch exterior is - I suspect - evil and spice and more evil, shallow bitch interior. The way you place the flashbacks makes it that much more interesting because the reader looks at it in a perspective of someone who already knows what happens next. Then you start to go, "Ohhh, so that's why her last name is Leigh!" or "That's what she meant when she said it was the cheer she never got to perform..." :/ Aden's a dick too. Douchery must run in the family because that was cold. Poor Leigh gets this shit thrown at her to otherwise stain her glamourous-turned-not-so-glamourous life. Now that I say it doesn't sound so tragic. Honestly though, that made me sad, how that last flashback went down. I feel bad because she held her pride, but missed out on something she genuinely wanted to do. Well, "wanted" is subjective, but generally, yeah.
7/14/2013 c15 
2mermaidprincesslilian
Screw the apologies and get on with the chapters. Wait, am I sounding like Leigh? Who's, you r one cool writer, anyway, next chapter quick and keep the flashbacks short. I'll be waiting (kiss)
2mermaidprincesslilianScrew the apologies and get on with the chapters. Wait, am I sounding like Leigh? Who's, you r one cool writer, anyway, next chapter quick and keep the flashbacks short. I'll be waiting (kiss)
7/14/2013 c15 Guest
Its coming along so good!...quick updates pretty pleeeeeeeez!?
Its coming along so good!...quick updates pretty pleeeeeeeez!?
7/14/2013 c13 Guest
Wait I'm confused... why did Josh sudden go from that to this? Or has he always been like this? I'm lost. Why did he decided to fist-kiss Leigh's face? D:
Thanks :D
Wait I'm confused... why did Josh sudden go from that to this? Or has he always been like this? I'm lost. Why did he decided to fist-kiss Leigh's face? D:
Thanks :D
7/14/2013 c15 NeverNeverLandGirl
The story just gets better and better! But anyway, I already loved you before and now I found out you like 90210... I just died. I LOVE THAT SHOW! All my friends don't like it and I'm glad to see that you like it. Anyway, update soon! Love your work!
The story just gets better and better! But anyway, I already loved you before and now I found out you like 90210... I just died. I LOVE THAT SHOW! All my friends don't like it and I'm glad to see that you like it. Anyway, update soon! Love your work!
7/13/2013 c15 beverlyamethyst
Hi! Sorry, I'm not bothered to log in right now but...
Amazing chapter! I loved it :) I really wanted a nice confrontation. I guess Josh will have to wait until next chapter though... Anyway, please update soon :D
Hi! Sorry, I'm not bothered to log in right now but...
Amazing chapter! I loved it :) I really wanted a nice confrontation. I guess Josh will have to wait until next chapter though... Anyway, please update soon :D
7/13/2013 c15 Angels.Will.Never.Fall
Hey, this is Wolflover08 but with an account- no stories yet, but I'll be uploading soon. I still love your story, just have half-season long marathons so you have time to write more! :P Love ya, update soon! :)
Hey, this is Wolflover08 but with an account- no stories yet, but I'll be uploading soon. I still love your story, just have half-season long marathons so you have time to write more! :P Love ya, update soon! :)
6/30/2013 c14 6Annything
Caught up now. On this and with my YouTube subscriptions. I am like a cat waiting to pounce on those updates. Especially Pewdie's The Last Of Us. God, that was such a good game. /off topic motherfucker
YUS. FEEL COMFORT WITH KYLE. HE IS ZE MAN.
See, you wouldn't have had a problem with being an outcast if you always were one. And my whole ninth grade year was a pretty nonexistence for me. I prefer it that way. I prefer it A LOT.
DAAAAAAAAAAAAMN. LEIGH KNOWS HOW TO PWN A GIRL. SHUT THAT BITCH DOWN! I hope Josh is offended. And, lol, sorry. Last review I think I called him John. I'M SO SORRY. xD I'VE BEEN TALKING TO A JOHN A LOT LATELY AND SO MY FINGERS GOT USED TO TYPING IT. WAH!
FUCK. WHAT THE FUCK. WHAT THE SHIT. WHAT THE ACTUAL FUCK? HE PUNCHED HER? HE PUNCHED HER? THAT IS DOMESTIC ABUSE! SHE'S A TINY CHEERLEADER AND PUNCHING YOU IS NOTHING. YOU CAN'T PUNCH HER BACK. FUCK. YOU'RE A NEAR SIX FOOT QUARTERBACK. WHAT THE FUCK. WHAT THE FUCK.
And, lemme just say, if a dude punched me my retinas will detach and I could possibly be blind for the rest of my life. But, most likely, it'd only be temporary 'cause there are surgeries for that. And, I'm not trying to say that all females are weaker than males because it's not true at all. I'm trying to say that males have a genetic code to make themselves strong, make themselves faster, make them gain muscle easier. (And, they are faster to an extent because women have a lot bigger pelvic bones.) Females are also designed to hold more fat (for babeh-makin'). And, I'm ranting right now but WHAT THE ACTUAL FUCK. There is an unspoken rule that a man should not beat on any women. Domestic abuse is a huge deal and is very scarring for the victim. LAW SUIT IN THE HOUSE.
No, but today's lesson for definitely is: Do not hit a woman back unless it is very very necessary. And if there is conflict, you should always try to restrain her before hittin' up on her. Not cool. Most males can easily restrain a female if she is going batshit crazy. I realize sometimes it's not that simple, but come on.
/end rant
JESSAMINE THAT SHIT. Nah, just kidding. Josh is using her like a tissue or some kind of towel for his ballsacks. And he's an asshole. An asshole with ballsacks. Sounds about right.
You have a lot of dialogue, but I think it works for you. You're just a dialogue gal. Which, lol, I'm not. I think it's because I am an awkward conversation person. And when I'm around my best friend and have loose lips, I don't remember what I'm saying. xD It's too natural, you know?
You also really show her absence of a thought filter these past two chapters. You know, keeping the characters consistent and plot in the right place. I can't really pinpoint an exact way to improve yourself, but I believe in you. I've been there since your first post. I only reviewed and got involved because a) it was entertaining and b) I think you have a lot of potential. I actually had a friend ask me about why I review you this much and I told her that and she told me, "You know, you are a very good person." I believe this is a very good compliment. c:
Keep on writing! Time is endless in summer!
6AnnythingCaught up now. On this and with my YouTube subscriptions. I am like a cat waiting to pounce on those updates. Especially Pewdie's The Last Of Us. God, that was such a good game. /off topic motherfucker
YUS. FEEL COMFORT WITH KYLE. HE IS ZE MAN.
See, you wouldn't have had a problem with being an outcast if you always were one. And my whole ninth grade year was a pretty nonexistence for me. I prefer it that way. I prefer it A LOT.
DAAAAAAAAAAAAMN. LEIGH KNOWS HOW TO PWN A GIRL. SHUT THAT BITCH DOWN! I hope Josh is offended. And, lol, sorry. Last review I think I called him John. I'M SO SORRY. xD I'VE BEEN TALKING TO A JOHN A LOT LATELY AND SO MY FINGERS GOT USED TO TYPING IT. WAH!
FUCK. WHAT THE FUCK. WHAT THE SHIT. WHAT THE ACTUAL FUCK? HE PUNCHED HER? HE PUNCHED HER? THAT IS DOMESTIC ABUSE! SHE'S A TINY CHEERLEADER AND PUNCHING YOU IS NOTHING. YOU CAN'T PUNCH HER BACK. FUCK. YOU'RE A NEAR SIX FOOT QUARTERBACK. WHAT THE FUCK. WHAT THE FUCK.
And, lemme just say, if a dude punched me my retinas will detach and I could possibly be blind for the rest of my life. But, most likely, it'd only be temporary 'cause there are surgeries for that. And, I'm not trying to say that all females are weaker than males because it's not true at all. I'm trying to say that males have a genetic code to make themselves strong, make themselves faster, make them gain muscle easier. (And, they are faster to an extent because women have a lot bigger pelvic bones.) Females are also designed to hold more fat (for babeh-makin'). And, I'm ranting right now but WHAT THE ACTUAL FUCK. There is an unspoken rule that a man should not beat on any women. Domestic abuse is a huge deal and is very scarring for the victim. LAW SUIT IN THE HOUSE.
No, but today's lesson for definitely is: Do not hit a woman back unless it is very very necessary. And if there is conflict, you should always try to restrain her before hittin' up on her. Not cool. Most males can easily restrain a female if she is going batshit crazy. I realize sometimes it's not that simple, but come on.
/end rant
JESSAMINE THAT SHIT. Nah, just kidding. Josh is using her like a tissue or some kind of towel for his ballsacks. And he's an asshole. An asshole with ballsacks. Sounds about right.
You have a lot of dialogue, but I think it works for you. You're just a dialogue gal. Which, lol, I'm not. I think it's because I am an awkward conversation person. And when I'm around my best friend and have loose lips, I don't remember what I'm saying. xD It's too natural, you know?
You also really show her absence of a thought filter these past two chapters. You know, keeping the characters consistent and plot in the right place. I can't really pinpoint an exact way to improve yourself, but I believe in you. I've been there since your first post. I only reviewed and got involved because a) it was entertaining and b) I think you have a lot of potential. I actually had a friend ask me about why I review you this much and I told her that and she told me, "You know, you are a very good person." I believe this is a very good compliment. c:
Keep on writing! Time is endless in summer!
6/30/2013 c13 Annything
God dammit. My computer crashed and I lost this review. :c I wasn't too far into it though, so it's not a big deal to reread. Yay!
Wow, lol, everyone has all come to the consensus that Leigh is a bitch and she agrees. You'd think someone would try to change their personality if it was so unappealing. xD But, I don't think she's bad. I hardly understand what makes her a bitch half the time.
But, for sure, Josh is an asshole. Screw the fact that Leigh is a supposed bitch. John is an asshole through and through.
Oh, come on. I can't believe she's gonna get chewed out for this. When people are threatening you or your friends, you don't LET THEM. You don't have time to ask for help. You just need to get your ass in gear and do something about it for yourself. If your flight-or-fight instinct is telling you fight, how is that not justified? When threatened, you make a choice like that unwillingly.
LOLOL. "I don't really believe you." YES. BECAUSE TAKING SIDES BASED ON POSITION IN SCHOOL SPIRIT IS TOTALLY A FAIR JUDGEMENT. Dumbass.
Also, going to add now, nice vocabulary. c:
lol, the skins and shirts thing reminds me of She's The Man when Viola is like, "Uhh... I need to be on the shirts team. I have a very rare skin condition... Yeah, I'm allergic to the sun. Not pretty." Ha, but now Amanda Bynes is a famous fail with ugly hair, drug addiction, and nasty personality. Darn. And I really liked the Amanda Show. That's where Drake And Josh came from. Good times.
YOLO, AM I RIGHT?
No, not really.
I really enjoy reading this piece. It's always so light-hearted and cheerful. I mean, even during the dramatic moments. It doesn't get that heavy, you know? Just enough drama to make it interesting. But, I probably have a cold heart because of how much sad, heavy shit I read. And I write. Actually, I kinda LIKE crying to sad stories. I swear, I hardly cry over sad things in real life. I used to, at the beginning of my depression, but it just hardens you up over time. So when you're sad you don't cry but just lay there, half-lidded and just thinking. Although, I do cry during my dissociative episodes. I get freaked out by the shit in my room and by my age and by my grade level. Sounds like a weird thing to get worked up over, huh?
I feel like this review got super personal, but I ain't got no problem with that. Share those feels, honey child!
Hmm, I feel like I saw a few typos, but I did just read a fanfic chapter with a big number of typos so it may not have been you. Skim it over just to be sure. Replacing chapters is easier now with FP and doesn't get rid of your reviews.
Anyway, I'm glad I'm getting back to this. It's been so long that those emails have been there what with everything going on. Hopefully you'll have lots more time this summer. c:
God dammit. My computer crashed and I lost this review. :c I wasn't too far into it though, so it's not a big deal to reread. Yay!
Wow, lol, everyone has all come to the consensus that Leigh is a bitch and she agrees. You'd think someone would try to change their personality if it was so unappealing. xD But, I don't think she's bad. I hardly understand what makes her a bitch half the time.
But, for sure, Josh is an asshole. Screw the fact that Leigh is a supposed bitch. John is an asshole through and through.
Oh, come on. I can't believe she's gonna get chewed out for this. When people are threatening you or your friends, you don't LET THEM. You don't have time to ask for help. You just need to get your ass in gear and do something about it for yourself. If your flight-or-fight instinct is telling you fight, how is that not justified? When threatened, you make a choice like that unwillingly.
LOLOL. "I don't really believe you." YES. BECAUSE TAKING SIDES BASED ON POSITION IN SCHOOL SPIRIT IS TOTALLY A FAIR JUDGEMENT. Dumbass.
Also, going to add now, nice vocabulary. c:
lol, the skins and shirts thing reminds me of She's The Man when Viola is like, "Uhh... I need to be on the shirts team. I have a very rare skin condition... Yeah, I'm allergic to the sun. Not pretty." Ha, but now Amanda Bynes is a famous fail with ugly hair, drug addiction, and nasty personality. Darn. And I really liked the Amanda Show. That's where Drake And Josh came from. Good times.
YOLO, AM I RIGHT?
No, not really.
I really enjoy reading this piece. It's always so light-hearted and cheerful. I mean, even during the dramatic moments. It doesn't get that heavy, you know? Just enough drama to make it interesting. But, I probably have a cold heart because of how much sad, heavy shit I read. And I write. Actually, I kinda LIKE crying to sad stories. I swear, I hardly cry over sad things in real life. I used to, at the beginning of my depression, but it just hardens you up over time. So when you're sad you don't cry but just lay there, half-lidded and just thinking. Although, I do cry during my dissociative episodes. I get freaked out by the shit in my room and by my age and by my grade level. Sounds like a weird thing to get worked up over, huh?
I feel like this review got super personal, but I ain't got no problem with that. Share those feels, honey child!
Hmm, I feel like I saw a few typos, but I did just read a fanfic chapter with a big number of typos so it may not have been you. Skim it over just to be sure. Replacing chapters is easier now with FP and doesn't get rid of your reviews.
Anyway, I'm glad I'm getting back to this. It's been so long that those emails have been there what with everything going on. Hopefully you'll have lots more time this summer. c:
6/24/2013 c12 Annything
Jude all the way, motherfuckers. Sweetest guy in this story. Except Kyle is really sweet too. He also matches Leigh's personality really well. But that might be a bad thing because of how flirty they both are and how they can't stay attached to anyone. But, still, adorable.
Poor Travis though. I know what it's like to like someone and constantly feel like you're getting closer and then getting pushed away only to get closer again. It's a fucking vicious cycle that will never stop with that relationship. Sometimes you just need to give it a clean break. ... As if I follow my own advice.
I like Jude when he's all comfortable with Leigh. He's real chill. It's cute.
It's nice knowing that a girl as outgoing and confident as Leigh is insecure as well. It's really important to show both sides of a character, you know? People are never 100% any characteristic or emotion or personality. There's always a combination.
YUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUSSSSSSS. LEIGH THINKS KYLE IS HOT. THIS IS IT. SHE IS FEELIN' HIM. :D
Kylllleeeeee.
Jude all the way, motherfuckers. Sweetest guy in this story. Except Kyle is really sweet too. He also matches Leigh's personality really well. But that might be a bad thing because of how flirty they both are and how they can't stay attached to anyone. But, still, adorable.
Poor Travis though. I know what it's like to like someone and constantly feel like you're getting closer and then getting pushed away only to get closer again. It's a fucking vicious cycle that will never stop with that relationship. Sometimes you just need to give it a clean break. ... As if I follow my own advice.
I like Jude when he's all comfortable with Leigh. He's real chill. It's cute.
It's nice knowing that a girl as outgoing and confident as Leigh is insecure as well. It's really important to show both sides of a character, you know? People are never 100% any characteristic or emotion or personality. There's always a combination.
YUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUSSSSSSS. LEIGH THINKS KYLE IS HOT. THIS IS IT. SHE IS FEELIN' HIM. :D
Kylllleeeeee.
6/24/2013 c11 Annything
You can not believe me right now. I started another review for chapter ten and was halfway through when I looked at the review section and saw I already reviewed. Not only that, but I wrote that review several times before realizing I already did one. And then I forgot and tried writing one again. WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH ME. I checked this time though. ._.
I don't know why, but I think it was a smart move to lie to Aden. You know. You don't need conflict in a fucking ice cream shop. That would be really awkward. And, DAMN KYLE, you go defend that girl! He really is pretty awesome for defending her though, even though he doesn't realize that Leigh is that girl. It's really cool. c:
OH shit. That ending. Travis is mad. I don't blame him either. I mean, wait, actually I kinda do. He's been chasing her all this time and she's constantly said no, no matter how many time she says it, he still is an idiot and comes back. Like, why would he put himself under that kind of torture? It's really dumb.
And, Leigh is just too saucy to be tactful to any guy. Wait, she's not tactful at all. She has no thought filter! HA HA. THIS IS THE REASON WHY SHE'S A BITCH TO EVERYONE. SHE CAN NOT STOP THE TRUTH.
Although, it's not really her that's a bitch, it's just that truth is a bitch.
You can not believe me right now. I started another review for chapter ten and was halfway through when I looked at the review section and saw I already reviewed. Not only that, but I wrote that review several times before realizing I already did one. And then I forgot and tried writing one again. WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH ME. I checked this time though. ._.
I don't know why, but I think it was a smart move to lie to Aden. You know. You don't need conflict in a fucking ice cream shop. That would be really awkward. And, DAMN KYLE, you go defend that girl! He really is pretty awesome for defending her though, even though he doesn't realize that Leigh is that girl. It's really cool. c:
OH shit. That ending. Travis is mad. I don't blame him either. I mean, wait, actually I kinda do. He's been chasing her all this time and she's constantly said no, no matter how many time she says it, he still is an idiot and comes back. Like, why would he put himself under that kind of torture? It's really dumb.
And, Leigh is just too saucy to be tactful to any guy. Wait, she's not tactful at all. She has no thought filter! HA HA. THIS IS THE REASON WHY SHE'S A BITCH TO EVERYONE. SHE CAN NOT STOP THE TRUTH.
Although, it's not really her that's a bitch, it's just that truth is a bitch.
6/20/2013 c13 chocolatepinkgum
It seems it's too early for Leigh to date. She is only high school student. It also would be better if she solve the dispute peacefully instead of punching. She is not 5 years old she is almost 16,so maturity is not something so rare in her peers. Find a shoulder to cry if the stress is too much. A chocolatepinkgummy bear girl is always demure. I really hope Leigh will grow out of this "teenage time". Chapter is a bit long, you have a pool of vocaburary, I am impressed. Wish you good work, good mood...
It seems it's too early for Leigh to date. She is only high school student. It also would be better if she solve the dispute peacefully instead of punching. She is not 5 years old she is almost 16,so maturity is not something so rare in her peers. Find a shoulder to cry if the stress is too much. A chocolatepinkgummy bear girl is always demure. I really hope Leigh will grow out of this "teenage time". Chapter is a bit long, you have a pool of vocaburary, I am impressed. Wish you good work, good mood...
6/7/2013 c14 de best story
I just realized this...and I know it seems pretty childish, but my guest avatar or whatever is a freaking green fairy thing...What the heck!? At least pick a better avatar for guests, fanpress! Heck, I would be in heaven if they removed the fairy and just used a white background! Anyhoo...I loved your chapter nonetheless. It seems pretty dramatic right now. Who am I kidding? Obviously it is! ;] You have a pure talent for writing. I mean...honestly...it's a lot more different and unique from other authors' styles of writing-in a good way. Can NOT wait for the next chapter.
I just realized this...and I know it seems pretty childish, but my guest avatar or whatever is a freaking green fairy thing...What the heck!? At least pick a better avatar for guests, fanpress! Heck, I would be in heaven if they removed the fairy and just used a white background! Anyhoo...I loved your chapter nonetheless. It seems pretty dramatic right now. Who am I kidding? Obviously it is! ;] You have a pure talent for writing. I mean...honestly...it's a lot more different and unique from other authors' styles of writing-in a good way. Can NOT wait for the next chapter.