for Runaway, Light of the Night2/21 c1 adamfranklin.uu
The characters were believable and the emotions kept me involved throughout It would look great in a comic book format and I'm anxious to bring it to life
Thank you for sharing this amazing piece. I look forward to hearing more of your stories.
The characters were believable and the emotions kept me involved throughout It would look great in a comic book format and I'm anxious to bring it to life
Thank you for sharing this amazing piece. I look forward to hearing more of your stories.
3/13/2013 c1 roxy
you have to write more! this is so beautiful and poetic you have no idea. i haven't read anything like this in a long time, besides the stuff my friend revamp does. amazing job!
you have to write more! this is so beautiful and poetic you have no idea. i haven't read anything like this in a long time, besides the stuff my friend revamp does. amazing job!
12/5/2012 c1 
13Revamp
I happened across this story searching around on a friend's biography after doing some co author stuff. I must say that your sense of description is beautiful and your overall piece is well done. I would love to see more chapters of this story. I'll be putting it on my favorites list as well.
13RevampI happened across this story searching around on a friend's biography after doing some co author stuff. I must say that your sense of description is beautiful and your overall piece is well done. I would love to see more chapters of this story. I'll be putting it on my favorites list as well.
10/13/2012 c1 9MagicWords
Wow, this was really dark and poetic. You have such a way with descriptive words. The last line makes me think that there is a lot more to come! Very cool!
9MagicWordsWow, this was really dark and poetic. You have such a way with descriptive words. The last line makes me think that there is a lot more to come! Very cool!
8/31/2012 c1 16Meadow Frost
I like it, it seems very dark so far. I had a hard time reading it though and really grasping what was going on, because of the huge amount of adjectives. Sometimes I do that to though . I'll admit it's fun. But so other people can fully enjoy it, I'd recommend you cut back on it a bit.
16Meadow FrostI like it, it seems very dark so far. I had a hard time reading it though and really grasping what was going on, because of the huge amount of adjectives. Sometimes I do that to though . I'll admit it's fun. But so other people can fully enjoy it, I'd recommend you cut back on it a bit.
8/31/2012 c1 4SibylofSilicon
I want to read more, but I only managed about halfway, sorry.
Waaaay too many adjectives! Seriously, read it out loud and count how many you have as you go. Trust me, if you get rid of half of them you'll be doing yourself, and your story, a HUGE favour. In fact, maybe just leave a third.
On the other hand, it does all seem a little dark and disturbing. I like that.
4SibylofSiliconI want to read more, but I only managed about halfway, sorry.
Waaaay too many adjectives! Seriously, read it out loud and count how many you have as you go. Trust me, if you get rid of half of them you'll be doing yourself, and your story, a HUGE favour. In fact, maybe just leave a third.
On the other hand, it does all seem a little dark and disturbing. I like that.
8/31/2012 c1 4Aizawa Minami
Wow, this piece is truly a sense of gorifying truth that happens in life, good job on this one, I hope to see more.
4Aizawa MinamiWow, this piece is truly a sense of gorifying truth that happens in life, good job on this one, I hope to see more.