for My Daddy Lies6/2/2005 c1 words you used to know
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I'm honestly crying.
Your piece... I don't think I have ever read something to capture my emotions, to pull me in, such a powerful piece. And now I'm pathetically rubbing my eyes because it's all I can do. You've so powerfully expressed a heartbreakingly sad scenario, the childish innocence and the greed of a neglecting parent. The point of view was well-chosen to.
I absolutely loved it.
Need I even SAY that I'm adding it to my faves?
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I'm honestly crying.
Your piece... I don't think I have ever read something to capture my emotions, to pull me in, such a powerful piece. And now I'm pathetically rubbing my eyes because it's all I can do. You've so powerfully expressed a heartbreakingly sad scenario, the childish innocence and the greed of a neglecting parent. The point of view was well-chosen to.
I absolutely loved it.
Need I even SAY that I'm adding it to my faves?
1/30/2002 c1 Blue Moon
I don't know anything about poetry, so I can't figure out what kind of format your useing, but I do like what you said.
I don't know anything about poetry, so I can't figure out what kind of format your useing, but I do like what you said.
3/8/2001 c1 Ashley
That was so good. It really was! I was almost in tears.
That was so good. It really was! I was almost in tears.
1/13/2001 c1 
79Dleet
This one was incredibly touching, but I think I liked your other one a bit more. The other one had a better flow. In this, the rythym was broken sometimes in the wrong places, but you got the right ones too, like when you listing things. Still, though, this was incredibly good. Write some more!
79DleetThis one was incredibly touching, but I think I liked your other one a bit more. The other one had a better flow. In this, the rythym was broken sometimes in the wrong places, but you got the right ones too, like when you listing things. Still, though, this was incredibly good. Write some more!
7/3/2000 c1 21janet84
Incredible poem. I came back to review it (wasn't logged in before) You should be incredibly proud! :-)
~Please read my works! Please? :-) It's a happy, sarcastic contrast to this.~
21janet84Incredible poem. I came back to review it (wasn't logged in before) You should be incredibly proud! :-)
~Please read my works! Please? :-) It's a happy, sarcastic contrast to this.~
6/2/2000 c1 Inna
That was so depressing...and good too. It seems far fetched but I'm sure that happens...~sniff~...nice poem. The formatting is sort of confusing though.
That was so depressing...and good too. It seems far fetched but I'm sure that happens...~sniff~...nice poem. The formatting is sort of confusing though.
6/2/2000 c1 Ash The Wanderer
I really hope this is justa poem you made up and not based on stuff that happened to you or someone you know. Because if this father you speak of was yours, and if you efer see him again, I highly advise you to put a bullet in his brain. He deserves nothing less.
I really hope this is justa poem you made up and not based on stuff that happened to you or someone you know. Because if this father you speak of was yours, and if you efer see him again, I highly advise you to put a bullet in his brain. He deserves nothing less.
6/2/2000 c1 tabaqui
ouch...sad. a very good and "honest" poem though.
ouch...sad. a very good and "honest" poem though.