for The Ghosts5/31/2005 c1 words you used to know
The dark imagery and free verse format made this a simply incredible read and an inevitable favourite. Your skills of depiction are truly something to marvel at. Just one miniscule thing to gripe about; the word squishing, it sort of took away from the whole dramatically horrific flow of the opening you set up. It's not really a big thing, but just the way the word 'squish' sounds throws it off slightly... at least, that's what I felt. Doubt it really matters much...
Overall, spectacular. Need I say more?
RAWQ ON
The dark imagery and free verse format made this a simply incredible read and an inevitable favourite. Your skills of depiction are truly something to marvel at. Just one miniscule thing to gripe about; the word squishing, it sort of took away from the whole dramatically horrific flow of the opening you set up. It's not really a big thing, but just the way the word 'squish' sounds throws it off slightly... at least, that's what I felt. Doubt it really matters much...
Overall, spectacular. Need I say more?
RAWQ ON
11/23/2002 c1 caz-gobby
the subject matter was fab and it is beautiful but waht impressed me most was the style. The way the length of the lines varies depending on what you are writing about to emphasise the subject of the line. Really well written.
the subject matter was fab and it is beautiful but waht impressed me most was the style. The way the length of the lines varies depending on what you are writing about to emphasise the subject of the line. Really well written.
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