for A Hand On My Shoulder4/24/2013 c1 
1CJRobley
Best line ever: "I opened up Office, like I always do when I'm feeling bad..."
I laughed, and I don't normally, but that line seemed hilarious for some reason. Good story!
1CJRobleyBest line ever: "I opened up Office, like I always do when I'm feeling bad..."
I laughed, and I don't normally, but that line seemed hilarious for some reason. Good story!
9/27/2012 c1 4Lolitroy
Omg this gave me goosebumps :O
Although to be sincere it would've been better if it had ended when it said "behin you" or something. Just my opinion, don't take it too seriously haha
4LolitroyOmg this gave me goosebumps :O
Although to be sincere it would've been better if it had ended when it said "behin you" or something. Just my opinion, don't take it too seriously haha
9/10/2012 c1 Nonexistent Phantom
This was quite a unique piece. It was suspenseful and captivating, and you seem to be in control of your grammar. I would prefer a bit more description of the surroundings. What was the weather like? Was it raining? Was it windy? Were the skies eerily calm? All in all, I did enjoy this story. But the curse words did give this a bit of a bitter aftertaste, and in my opinion, this little tale would have been better off without them. I applaud you, however, and I am adding this to favorites.
...Pretty soon I am going to compose my own submission to FictionPress, but for now I am surfing the website to see what others have written...
Kudos to you,
-Morbid Quill
This was quite a unique piece. It was suspenseful and captivating, and you seem to be in control of your grammar. I would prefer a bit more description of the surroundings. What was the weather like? Was it raining? Was it windy? Were the skies eerily calm? All in all, I did enjoy this story. But the curse words did give this a bit of a bitter aftertaste, and in my opinion, this little tale would have been better off without them. I applaud you, however, and I am adding this to favorites.
...Pretty soon I am going to compose my own submission to FictionPress, but for now I am surfing the website to see what others have written...
Kudos to you,
-Morbid Quill