for the misalignment of time when i'm near you9/22/2012 c1 
99Dreamers-Requiem
I really like the way you've used images here; they're simple, but quite effective. The use of words works, especially to convey so much in a short space. The only suggestion I would have is to maybe get rid of the italic letters at the start of each sentence. I don't feel they really do anything, and if you're trying to do something with them I don't think it's coming across. Reading it, I was sort of emphasing the first word of each line but it made it read unnautrally. Just a suggestion.
99Dreamers-RequiemI really like the way you've used images here; they're simple, but quite effective. The use of words works, especially to convey so much in a short space. The only suggestion I would have is to maybe get rid of the italic letters at the start of each sentence. I don't feel they really do anything, and if you're trying to do something with them I don't think it's coming across. Reading it, I was sort of emphasing the first word of each line but it made it read unnautrally. Just a suggestion.