for It Will Be a Miracle If We Live to Adulthood9/23/2012 c1 
6Ophelia Schmit
You know when somebody tells someone to lay off the f-bombs? This is how I think your period usage is: like an f-bomb. Excuse the rudeness of my comment, but I had to use something similar. It's not a bad story, it's great, it's just that you could make your sentences longer.
-Hermie
6Ophelia SchmitYou know when somebody tells someone to lay off the f-bombs? This is how I think your period usage is: like an f-bomb. Excuse the rudeness of my comment, but I had to use something similar. It's not a bad story, it's great, it's just that you could make your sentences longer.
-Hermie