for I was an Angel11/17/2012 c1 
1tamarind21
I'm sorry, hope I'm not posting this twice, but the first post didn't go through. I really like your story, it seems cool and has a lot of potential. But, your English is really ungrammatical. So I want to help you. I can be your beta. I'll clean up your English mistakes, so the beauty of this story can be seen. I don't want anything. I just like this story. Pm me.
1tamarind21I'm sorry, hope I'm not posting this twice, but the first post didn't go through. I really like your story, it seems cool and has a lot of potential. But, your English is really ungrammatical. So I want to help you. I can be your beta. I'll clean up your English mistakes, so the beauty of this story can be seen. I don't want anything. I just like this story. Pm me.
11/17/2012 c6 tamarind21
Hey, sayure, this is really random, but I love this fiction. I think it has the potential to be really good. I just randomly decided that I finally would stop lurking on fictionpress and take part. Here's the problem with your fiction though, English is not your first language and it shows. I want to be your beta. I can fix your english mistakes and rewrite the grammar so everyone can appreciate this story for how cool it is. Pm me.
Hey, sayure, this is really random, but I love this fiction. I think it has the potential to be really good. I just randomly decided that I finally would stop lurking on fictionpress and take part. Here's the problem with your fiction though, English is not your first language and it shows. I want to be your beta. I can fix your english mistakes and rewrite the grammar so everyone can appreciate this story for how cool it is. Pm me.
11/1/2012 c1 7Ange Noire
I see what you mean when you say that this is written differently than English - you wrote it in present tense. I would be careful with that, you need to be consistent.
Also, English isn't your first language, is it? Est ce que vous êtes Français? Parce ça fera plus de sense pour moi. (Votre grammaire est horrible!) Aussi, qui et First puis Second? C'est difficile de suivre.
Si vous êtes Français, je vous conseille de parlez à quelqu'un qui comprend la langue meilleur. If you're not French, then you seriously need to work on how to proof-read and self-edit your work.
7Ange NoireI see what you mean when you say that this is written differently than English - you wrote it in present tense. I would be careful with that, you need to be consistent.
Also, English isn't your first language, is it? Est ce que vous êtes Français? Parce ça fera plus de sense pour moi. (Votre grammaire est horrible!) Aussi, qui et First puis Second? C'est difficile de suivre.
Si vous êtes Français, je vous conseille de parlez à quelqu'un qui comprend la langue meilleur. If you're not French, then you seriously need to work on how to proof-read and self-edit your work.
10/4/2012 c4 SoullessBitch
that made no since...who is #1 and #2?
that made no since...who is #1 and #2?