for Eternal Covenant9/22/2017 c1 slcjnk2008
Hi K.G. Inglis, author extraordinaire,
Congratulations, I'm practically jumping up and down with excitement and happiness for you and me. I get to own your ebooks. It will be a challenge to wait till November, but I think I can manage unless I pass a bookstore first and pick it up then.
I'll be looking for you on Facebook and Goodreads.
Keep me posted on future happenings.
Much success, Shelley
Hi K.G. Inglis, author extraordinaire,
Congratulations, I'm practically jumping up and down with excitement and happiness for you and me. I get to own your ebooks. It will be a challenge to wait till November, but I think I can manage unless I pass a bookstore first and pick it up then.
I'll be looking for you on Facebook and Goodreads.
Keep me posted on future happenings.
Much success, Shelley
11/19/2015 c11 
2madamemercurial
Still love it. Notice some word confusion though. It's Cirrhosis of the liver, and you've a wee confusion between affect and effect now and again. It doesn't stop this from being one of the best pieces I've ever read on FP.
I can't wait to read all the rest,
lots of love,
Merc
2madamemercurialStill love it. Notice some word confusion though. It's Cirrhosis of the liver, and you've a wee confusion between affect and effect now and again. It doesn't stop this from being one of the best pieces I've ever read on FP.
I can't wait to read all the rest,
lots of love,
Merc
11/19/2015 c4 madamemercurial
Love it! Love, love, love it! I nearly didn't get past chapter one, since I'm pregnant and cry super easily, but wow. I adore this!
The only tiny, wee smidgen of concrit I could offer is line page breaks. I'm noticing your paragraphs jump a little, and a page break would be nice. (yeah, this is coming from me... I only just learned of their existence a short while ago... so I'm sorry about that)
Love love love it!
And onward we go...
merc
Love it! Love, love, love it! I nearly didn't get past chapter one, since I'm pregnant and cry super easily, but wow. I adore this!
The only tiny, wee smidgen of concrit I could offer is line page breaks. I'm noticing your paragraphs jump a little, and a page break would be nice. (yeah, this is coming from me... I only just learned of their existence a short while ago... so I'm sorry about that)
Love love love it!
And onward we go...
merc
1/25/2015 c5 2Demon Writer Guy
Typo:
" What was that expression? oh yeh.." 'yeah' needs to be 'yeah', and the paragraph this line is on needs quotation marks.
Your writing seems to have improved. I didn't notice nearly as many run-on sentences, so that's good.
Story-wise, not much really happens apart from that monk's death. Fortunately, it doesn't drag and it holds my interest.
Overall, it's a good chapter.
2Demon Writer GuyTypo:
" What was that expression? oh yeh.." 'yeah' needs to be 'yeah', and the paragraph this line is on needs quotation marks.
Your writing seems to have improved. I didn't notice nearly as many run-on sentences, so that's good.
Story-wise, not much really happens apart from that monk's death. Fortunately, it doesn't drag and it holds my interest.
Overall, it's a good chapter.
1/19/2015 c3 Snurtlicious
Alright so chapter was enticing and interesting. Your characterization is still strong and on point for the ones you've revealed.
I did notice one more repetition problem, but it's super easy to fix, so no harm, no foul.
Alright so chapter was enticing and interesting. Your characterization is still strong and on point for the ones you've revealed.
I did notice one more repetition problem, but it's super easy to fix, so no harm, no foul.
1/19/2015 c2 Snurtlicious
Okay so this chapter does a good job creating the setting while casting your heroine (or who I'm assuming is the heroine). Regardless, the characters seem really vivid, so good job on that.
The issue with the run-on sentences still persists in a couple places, but the repetitive word choice seems like it was just a one-time error.
Your writing gets better as it goes on and I'm still interested to see what happened to Sammeal still, so I'm pressing on to the next chapter.
Okay so this chapter does a good job creating the setting while casting your heroine (or who I'm assuming is the heroine). Regardless, the characters seem really vivid, so good job on that.
The issue with the run-on sentences still persists in a couple places, but the repetitive word choice seems like it was just a one-time error.
Your writing gets better as it goes on and I'm still interested to see what happened to Sammeal still, so I'm pressing on to the next chapter.
1/19/2015 c1 Snurtlicious
Okay so this gets better as it goes on. I'm totally over vampire stories (since a million bad tween vampire novels effectively killed the genre), but you found a way to actually make it interesting again, so kudos to you on that.
My note on style, which is one that I have to tell a lot of people (and I'm guilty of occasionally), is to watch out for run on sentences. Also in some places your word choice can be a little repetitive. Example: "He had to restrain himself from stroking the lock which fell below the level of her veil which covered most of her head and shoulders." This is both a run on sentence and a repetitive sentence. The two "which"s make it a little weird to read, plus the sentence is a bit too long as well.
I'm intrigued to read the next two chapters though, so good job!
Okay so this gets better as it goes on. I'm totally over vampire stories (since a million bad tween vampire novels effectively killed the genre), but you found a way to actually make it interesting again, so kudos to you on that.
My note on style, which is one that I have to tell a lot of people (and I'm guilty of occasionally), is to watch out for run on sentences. Also in some places your word choice can be a little repetitive. Example: "He had to restrain himself from stroking the lock which fell below the level of her veil which covered most of her head and shoulders." This is both a run on sentence and a repetitive sentence. The two "which"s make it a little weird to read, plus the sentence is a bit too long as well.
I'm intrigued to read the next two chapters though, so good job!
10/6/2014 c4 Demon Writer Guy
Small typo:
"...where are you now? "H " The sentence is just cut-off at the end.
Other than that, there isn't really much I can say about this chapter. I liked the introduction of the professor and his overall personality so far. And based off the origins of Lilith's name, I'm fairly certain she's gonna be a very important character in the story. The descriptions for that mystery girl and the thug were nice as well.
Overall, it's a very good chapter. I'll read more.
Small typo:
"...where are you now? "H " The sentence is just cut-off at the end.
Other than that, there isn't really much I can say about this chapter. I liked the introduction of the professor and his overall personality so far. And based off the origins of Lilith's name, I'm fairly certain she's gonna be a very important character in the story. The descriptions for that mystery girl and the thug were nice as well.
Overall, it's a very good chapter. I'll read more.
10/4/2014 c3 Demon Writer Guy
I really liked the descriptions you had for this chapter. I especially liked the description of the nightclub, It really did feel like a grand hall.
So far, I like Alaric. Apart from hitting Alex (which was somewhat uncalled for) He seems like a nice guy.
One thing I've noticed is that you sometimes don't place a comma before someone name (example: "Hello, Cassie.") if you don't have a comma it implies that the word is being used to describe her.
Overall, it's a good chapter.
I really liked the descriptions you had for this chapter. I especially liked the description of the nightclub, It really did feel like a grand hall.
So far, I like Alaric. Apart from hitting Alex (which was somewhat uncalled for) He seems like a nice guy.
One thing I've noticed is that you sometimes don't place a comma before someone name (example: "Hello, Cassie.") if you don't have a comma it implies that the word is being used to describe her.
Overall, it's a good chapter.
10/1/2014 c30 Avid reader
By the looks of this excerpt, I'm going to really enjoy this next story ;D
By the looks of this excerpt, I'm going to really enjoy this next story ;D
10/1/2014 c29 Avid reader
Alaric has the one thing he has always wanted, a family again. Somehow I doubt that it's going to be so easy to get Alex back, even with Abby able to track his location.
How interesting too that they have only just discovered Lilith as a traitor in their midst, but it seems that there is a second one. I'm sure he's going to make things even harder for them during the next part of this story.
I can't wait to read it! :)
Alaric has the one thing he has always wanted, a family again. Somehow I doubt that it's going to be so easy to get Alex back, even with Abby able to track his location.
How interesting too that they have only just discovered Lilith as a traitor in their midst, but it seems that there is a second one. I'm sure he's going to make things even harder for them during the next part of this story.
I can't wait to read it! :)
10/1/2014 c28 Avid reader
As I'd hoped, this chapter was full of fantastic action and drama. I couldn't look away from the page if I tried. So, Ahriman is gone but by the looks of it, maybe not for good. Cassie is now a true immortal like Alaric and the Professor has ascended to heaven with the spear. That just leaves Alex's fate?
As I'd hoped, this chapter was full of fantastic action and drama. I couldn't look away from the page if I tried. So, Ahriman is gone but by the looks of it, maybe not for good. Cassie is now a true immortal like Alaric and the Professor has ascended to heaven with the spear. That just leaves Alex's fate?
10/1/2014 c27 Avid reader
Poor Brian Harlow, dead :( It seems though that maybe the ambush the night before was intended as a distraction for Ahriman's real goal, to get to Cassie and by the looks of it, Alex too. What a revelation, Cassie and Alex are actually brother and sister, not cousins as they'd always believed.
Although, now Ahriman now has Alex being whisked off to god knows where and has Cassie's blood in his veins and Alaric is unprepared for whatever the evil angel has in store for him too. This is building to a great climax to this book :)
Poor Brian Harlow, dead :( It seems though that maybe the ambush the night before was intended as a distraction for Ahriman's real goal, to get to Cassie and by the looks of it, Alex too. What a revelation, Cassie and Alex are actually brother and sister, not cousins as they'd always believed.
Although, now Ahriman now has Alex being whisked off to god knows where and has Cassie's blood in his veins and Alaric is unprepared for whatever the evil angel has in store for him too. This is building to a great climax to this book :)
10/1/2014 c26 Avid reader
More steamy hot sex ;)
I never trusted that surly secretary, Lilith and now it seems she has shown her true colours inviting in their enemy. I can't wait til she gets what's coming to her. Hopefully very soon.
More steamy hot sex ;)
I never trusted that surly secretary, Lilith and now it seems she has shown her true colours inviting in their enemy. I can't wait til she gets what's coming to her. Hopefully very soon.
10/1/2014 c25 Avid reader
Wow, I was hooked from the first word to the last in this chapter. So much drama and action. Poor Alex, it really isn't his night but he did manage to get that first kiss with Abby, even if he was half dead from blood loss at the time.
I don't envy the culprit for the ambush when Alaric finds him, I think they have a very short life span ;)
Wow, I was hooked from the first word to the last in this chapter. So much drama and action. Poor Alex, it really isn't his night but he did manage to get that first kiss with Abby, even if he was half dead from blood loss at the time.
I don't envy the culprit for the ambush when Alaric finds him, I think they have a very short life span ;)