3/12/2013 c1 44professional griefer
This was rather disjointed and confusing-I pretty much had no idea what was happening. And when Ashley told Autumn about Taryn, the crying seemed way too sudden. Actually, the whole mood change in the beginning was sudden and uncalled for.
Also, I don't think you need to describe everyone here in detail instantly, it's really not necessary, and is definitely a turn-off of mine-other people, too, I think.
So I was basically confused through all of this...but I'll read other chapters too.