7/20/2013 c17 PD
AWESOME CHAPTER! Seriously. The drama around it was so beautifully written that it actually drove me to tears. Damn. Keep going!

7/18/2013 c17 chameleonsoul
Oh god, that was gorgeous-the action/reaction scene with the traffic light, how do you come up with stuff like that? I love that Lara's finally letting some vulnerability show through, despite the fact that she's drunk whilst doing it. Fletch is an amazing character and it's seems that he's everything Lara needs right now. Like I said, gorgeous.

7/16/2013 c17 Mihoro
Another great chapter, it's really interesting to see what Lara and Fletcher are thinking. I can begin to comprehend why Lara acts the ways she does and the way you write her pain is easy to understand as well as being relatable. :)

7/14/2013 c17 1Jevanminx
Love it as always. I also love, though it sounds weird, that the talk about Donny made me cry,. Because you didn't go out of your way to make it sad, it just was because of how everything had happened. If that even makes sense.
JM

7/13/2013 c17 Peehee
This chapter was perfect.

7/12/2013 c17 7AMessofPickles
Oh Jesus. Like I said in my previous review I was definitely unprepared for this emotional rollercoaster of a chapter. Wow. I don't even know what to say. I'm completely speechless.

The pedestrian thing really got to me. The way you wrote it...it's just that I never thought a person could even feel that way and it just breaks my heart because it's LARA that we're talking about and oh god. Oh gosh I just wanna give her a hug :/ Poor girly.

I got to hand it to Fletcher for being such a trooper during this chapter. Like he has to deal with Donny's death as well but he was just so THERE for Lara when she really needed him the most and it was awesome and he's amazing.

Favorite Quotes:
I'd thought it was hilarious the first time he reached for a cup on the table and missed by a couple of centimetres, I'd teased him about it for days.

Oh god this completely broke my heart since it's just such a Lara thing to do.

It was technically much the same as the last time I'd seen it; all his possessions on the shelves, single bed in the middle of the room, surf posters on the walls, but it was wrong somehow. Like a set designer had tried to recreate it from a description and ended up with a pale imitation. It wasn't messy enough to be Donny's room, for a start...

This whole passage was brilliant. I just loved the way you described his room and his absence. I dunno I just thought it was a really powerful passage.

"You're drunk, babe, you're not driving," he said calmly, his dark eyes incredibly soft. "Go say goodbye to your mum, and I'll take you wherever you want to go."

Aw. I know this is like a really serious moment and everything but this just completely melted me into a tiny little puddle of goo.

Once I reached the traffic lights I slammed my palm against the pedestrian button, the metallic clang more familiar to me even than my mum's embrace had been..."And it wasn't that I resented Donny, exactly," I continued, haltingly. "It was just that, my mum needed to be with him, and Dad was at work and everyone at school hated me and..." I swallowed thickly. "I'd have weeks where it felt like I'd been forgotten, like no-one had seen me. And, when it got to me, I'd come out here and I'd press this button. Because," I pointed up as the red man turned green, "the light would change and, for a second, everyone had to stop for me. Action/reaction, you see? If the light changed then I knew my existence had had some sort of impact."
...But, shit, she hadn't felt seen? Beautiful, strong, terrifying Lara hadn't felt seen? Had spent nights validating her existence by means of a set of traffic lights?

Oh dear oh dear. This part just completely broke me. I'm pretty sure I was bawling my eyes out at this point. The passage was almost uncomfortably familiar and it was just so sad. Oh Lara. I really just wanna give her a hug.

Fletch talked until his voice was hoarse and his chest ached from having to relive all of his snapshot memories for the second time that day. He didn't stop until he felt the very last shiver of tension leave her shoulders and heard her breathing even into sleep, and then he stretched out carefully alongside her.

He was knackered, but forced himself to stay awake for as long as possible. He needed to keep vigil, to make sure that the existence of the beautiful, damaged girl beside him was acknowledged by more than a Goddamn pedestrian light.

Like I said Fletch was a trooper during this chapter.

After this crazy chapter I don't even know if I'm ready for the next one. I'm curious how Fletcher and Lara's relationship will change after this because it'll be impossible for them have the same kind of forced emotional distance after this. But at the same time I think Lara might cling to that because that's routine and it's safe and she can't handle what Fletch might do if he decides to shake things up a bit. I don't even know what to say about the whole Saskia, and Salida thing because like Fletcher said "it's all surface bullshit..."

Hmm yeah I dunno. I can't wait to see where you take this story from here. Amazing chapter. Cannot wait for the next update :)

7/11/2013 c17 Lindsay
I don't know how to really express this but this chapter had an amazing way of being real. While a small portion of my emotional reaction could be attributed to PMS, most of it was the incredible way you portrayed these characters. I went through my first time losing someone incredibly close to me this last year and I could relate so well to the way Fletch said that each time he tells me the story, it feels less real. I'm usually great with words but my eloquence has up and left me in this moment. Anyway basically that was some downright powerful writing and I felt every emotion and ache in such a strong way, I've been crying like a baby. Thank you for sharing your writing with me.