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10/19/2013 c3 Draphy
This is my favorite chapter. I think it shows the wolf's dilemma, more than the others. The story as a whole is touching. I wonder how his past was. Hope you'll put that up!
9/7/2013 c6 xxxyx
You have a consistent style with poetry, I see. But this time, I find it being more and more descriptive.

I wonder if this is symbolically representing something related to your own life. C;
9/7/2013 c5 xxxyx
Welcome to the pack!
The subtle touches, like why is it important for the wolf to stay by the female's side instead of behind or in front of her really interest me. If behind: Stalker wolf. If in front: This female is mine.
Lol, maybe I'm just the kind to guess too much.
9/6/2013 c4 xxxyx
Lovely development. Maybe it's just me, but it feels like watching a brush painting. Art. C:
9/6/2013 c3 xxxyx
The first four lines had a nice rhyme to it. Anyway, as for this chapter as a whole, you're improving, I can see the emotions!
9/6/2013 c2 xxxyx
Even better imagery. Despite being of few words, you know how to do the wolf's characterization. Good job! Will read on.
9/6/2013 c1 xxxyx
Nice imagery and good beginning. On to poetry adventure!
8/11/2013 c6 7Faylicia
I have been wondering if wolves really hunt on their owns some times... I don't know much about wolves.
I wonder if in the next chapter they will have children or something like that :D... But then again, how to wolves raise their children? Many male species tend to leave the children... but do wolves do that too? :
7/23/2013 c5 Faylicia
Is the the female wolf going to help the male wolf become more self confident? It kind of reminds me of Disney movies with animals and it cute :)
7/23/2013 c5 delacct
Oh man...I see that the poor wolf's not going to get the company he wants without having a few enemies!

"Moved" in the fourth to last line should be present tense since the rest of the poem is also in that tense.
7/23/2013 c4 delacct
I really like the imagery in this one. "Wolf" could be replaced by a pronoun in either of the last two lines to make them flow better.
7/23/2013 c3 delacct
The emotion is very strong in this one. I love it! From a critical perspective, I think that the words "eyes," "sad," and "staring/stares" were repetitive. Here are some potential ideas:
"Sitting he looks up with sad eyes"
"Every bright star a gloomy reminder"
"The wolf lowers his eyelids with a"
7/23/2013 c2 delacct
The last line is awesomely creepy. Just to point out a few typos if you don't mind: don't forget the apostrophe on "can't" and also if you changed "soon to be" to"soon-to-be," it changes the way you read the verse. I think it flows better that way because I had to pause for a second and read those words again to understand what you meant.
7/23/2013 c1 delacct
Hi Fierce Ookami,

Thank you for the encouraging feedback! I'll make sure to correct the -kun and -chan descriptions. Don't worry; my next chapter will be much longer than this tiny flashback.

This poem is very simple and straightforward (which is good in this situation) and I could easily visualize the wolf in my head.
7/6/2013 c4 Faylicia
I like how even though the wolf has feelings it actually seems very realistic. I wonder if the female wolf will do something bad to him though...
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