for Remember12/20/2012 c1 
32RiddleSolved
This was a nice poem. I like how you manage to describe the sadness and loss without over-doing with emotional descriptions. It also reads very well and flows nice. As you don't follow any particular rhyming or rhythm it's quite hard to give constructive tips, but I think the one thing I personally would have liked is dividing into stanzas. As you're operating with present and past, it would be natural to have a change of paragraph between those lines.
32RiddleSolvedThis was a nice poem. I like how you manage to describe the sadness and loss without over-doing with emotional descriptions. It also reads very well and flows nice. As you don't follow any particular rhyming or rhythm it's quite hard to give constructive tips, but I think the one thing I personally would have liked is dividing into stanzas. As you're operating with present and past, it would be natural to have a change of paragraph between those lines.