for Mystic Woods12/10/2012 c1 
10Complex Variable
Very nice. :) Well edited, and it reads very smoothly.
You do an excellent job of establishing a strong dose of romantic/sexual tension without having to resort to the ickiness of being explicit. I would recommend trying to up the "poetic-ness" of your descriptions—add a little more figurative language, for instance—but, that's just me being me.
CV
10Complex VariableVery nice. :) Well edited, and it reads very smoothly.
You do an excellent job of establishing a strong dose of romantic/sexual tension without having to resort to the ickiness of being explicit. I would recommend trying to up the "poetic-ness" of your descriptions—add a little more figurative language, for instance—but, that's just me being me.
CV