for The Killing12/14/2012 c1 
10AlternatingCurrent
I really liked the part about the sparrow wishing he was a cloud. How often do humans wish they could be birds and fly, not thinking that birds might be wishing they could be something more than a bird! This story really makes you wonder how many stories go unseen and untold up in the sky. One quick thing, I think the second last sentence in the last paragraph runs on a little too long. You might try breaking it up with a period for a smoother flow. Overall, I felt like I was flying with them in the story. Well done!
10AlternatingCurrentI really liked the part about the sparrow wishing he was a cloud. How often do humans wish they could be birds and fly, not thinking that birds might be wishing they could be something more than a bird! This story really makes you wonder how many stories go unseen and untold up in the sky. One quick thing, I think the second last sentence in the last paragraph runs on a little too long. You might try breaking it up with a period for a smoother flow. Overall, I felt like I was flying with them in the story. Well done!