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12/19/2012 c1 2Comix and Co
Oooh interesting start! Can't wait to read the rest!
12/19/2012 c1 LoveDragonsForever
I like the fact that you're using an original currency-that makes the world more... different, somehow.

Is "that thing" supposed to refer to something that the audience is supposed to know about it? If so, make that bit clearer.

You didn't mention that Mark and Trancey had light blue hair. If they are the ones mentioned by Kieta and Yuriel, then you should add in something about that.

Over all I liked it! I hope my review helped! :)

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