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6LuxVenus
You know I just thought of something. I have naturally tan skin. So does my brother and my nephew. BUT we were not born that way. For a few weeks we were all a pink. My dad had the dark skin and my mom was white. Similar to Sadie. So when Sadie was first born you probably wouldn't have seen that she had a tan at all accept for the dark pink. I'm just putting it out there if you feel the need for accuracy in the story. I think its a silly detail but its usually how it works.
6LuxVenusYou know I just thought of something. I have naturally tan skin. So does my brother and my nephew. BUT we were not born that way. For a few weeks we were all a pink. My dad had the dark skin and my mom was white. Similar to Sadie. So when Sadie was first born you probably wouldn't have seen that she had a tan at all accept for the dark pink. I'm just putting it out there if you feel the need for accuracy in the story. I think its a silly detail but its usually how it works.
3/4/2013 c38 1InTheWind
great work as usual darling ;D i left u a present on pm's XD i loved this chapter and ur right the rythm was perfect :) its nice to really see Riley step up as a mom, it was hinted at before but never directly shown like it was here :)
1InTheWindgreat work as usual darling ;D i left u a present on pm's XD i loved this chapter and ur right the rythm was perfect :) its nice to really see Riley step up as a mom, it was hinted at before but never directly shown like it was here :)
3/3/2013 c38 Taint.Revile.Elude
Now, I liked Mackenzie and Riley so much in the beginning but I feel somewhere they took a turn for the cliche. It has been little things, mostly, but this chapter pushed it over the edge. The fact that Riley (who reads like a stereotypical man at times) isn't helping with the wedding ticked me off, it read like the husband who pays the bills but has no opinion. Also Mackenzie's Mommy drama, from even thinking on inviting Riley's Mom to the box, it felt at first unrealistic and then forced.
I simply want to go deeper with these characters and their world, which feels a tad forgotten since we don't see Sam or the brothers or even Riley's army pals anymore. I really hope this is helpful.
Now, I liked Mackenzie and Riley so much in the beginning but I feel somewhere they took a turn for the cliche. It has been little things, mostly, but this chapter pushed it over the edge. The fact that Riley (who reads like a stereotypical man at times) isn't helping with the wedding ticked me off, it read like the husband who pays the bills but has no opinion. Also Mackenzie's Mommy drama, from even thinking on inviting Riley's Mom to the box, it felt at first unrealistic and then forced.
I simply want to go deeper with these characters and their world, which feels a tad forgotten since we don't see Sam or the brothers or even Riley's army pals anymore. I really hope this is helpful.
3/1/2013 c37 InTheWind
hey hey hey ;) lil ol me again :P i hope ur headache gets better D: and i do have to say... Amelia is horrible and should b burned, but thats life, its not all sunshine and rainbows. Love ur work tho ;P cant wait for when Riley gets the horrid witch back :D
hey hey hey ;) lil ol me again :P i hope ur headache gets better D: and i do have to say... Amelia is horrible and should b burned, but thats life, its not all sunshine and rainbows. Love ur work tho ;P cant wait for when Riley gets the horrid witch back :D
3/1/2013 c37 pageisdeliberatelyleftblank
Bailey's mum is a complete bitch! It's also sad her dad didn't stand up for her more, but I guess Amelia definitely wears the pants in that relationship.
Bailey's mum is a complete bitch! It's also sad her dad didn't stand up for her more, but I guess Amelia definitely wears the pants in that relationship.
3/1/2013 c37 6LuxVenus
This Amelia better freaking come back and get her face punched in. What an ass hole! She was fucking raped and she says that shit?! UGHHHH!
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Sorry... Just some righteous indignation 't mind me.
Anyway I look forward to another chapter :D
6LuxVenusThis Amelia better freaking come back and get her face punched in. What an ass hole! She was fucking raped and she says that shit?! UGHHHH!
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Sorry... Just some righteous indignation 't mind me.
Anyway I look forward to another chapter :D
3/1/2013 c37 earthserpent
:D yay love it. this story is awesome. :) bring on the next one.
:D yay love it. this story is awesome. :) bring on the next one.
2/26/2013 c36 earthserpent
:D not bad not bad at all. :) bring on the next one.
:D not bad not bad at all. :) bring on the next one.
2/26/2013 c36 1InTheWind
well i for one enjoyed it a lot, thank u Emma :) i especially liked it when Kenz tore into that shrew of mother Riley has -.- i dont like her...
1InTheWindwell i for one enjoyed it a lot, thank u Emma :) i especially liked it when Kenz tore into that shrew of mother Riley has -.- i dont like her...
2/26/2013 c36 6CelticX
I promise, it was all very good and a thoroughly enjoyable chapter. I can't wait to see Part II ;-)
6CelticXI promise, it was all very good and a thoroughly enjoyable chapter. I can't wait to see Part II ;-)
2/25/2013 c35 CelticX
Like you, RL sometimes kicks us in the tail, but I finally got around to reading the chapter and once again you didn't disappoint. It was lovely. I guess next it's on to the big to do of meeting the 'rents. Can't wait to see what happens :-)
Like you, RL sometimes kicks us in the tail, but I finally got around to reading the chapter and once again you didn't disappoint. It was lovely. I guess next it's on to the big to do of meeting the 'rents. Can't wait to see what happens :-)