for Me Versus World1/25/2013 c1 Viviana
Hey Kathreen I FOUND YOUR ACCOUNT! HAHAHA CHEW ON THAT! TINANA TOLD ME! CHEW ON thAT! HAHAH! Tricked us well but, not well enough. See you at lunch to plan the banner at ISBA. XD
Hey Kathreen I FOUND YOUR ACCOUNT! HAHAHA CHEW ON THAT! TINANA TOLD ME! CHEW ON thAT! HAHAH! Tricked us well but, not well enough. See you at lunch to plan the banner at ISBA. XD
1/23/2013 c1 
8unconscious willpower
This story is terrifying and terrific. A helpless main character is stuck in a zombie epidemic with no idea what has happened. With no help in sight!
Delicious.
Please write more!
8unconscious willpowerThis story is terrifying and terrific. A helpless main character is stuck in a zombie epidemic with no idea what has happened. With no help in sight!
Delicious.
Please write more!
1/23/2013 c2 Guest
hey its angela.
this is pretty osm. :D
hey its angela.
this is pretty osm. :D
1/21/2013 c1 6harrisonmarks
Good intro, but if her last checkup was on January 23rd and Julie believes it is near the end of the year, and she had been in a coma, how did she survive without food or water?
6harrisonmarksGood intro, but if her last checkup was on January 23rd and Julie believes it is near the end of the year, and she had been in a coma, how did she survive without food or water?
12/29/2012 c2 18Sapphy-Sweets
I liked this update. I thoroughly enjoyed the description of the corpses.
Julie's desperation added to the severity of the situation.
Here is something I think should be revised:
"My hand tentatively reaches out and touches the bloody silver handle and turns."
This sentence is kind of a run-on. I had to reread it for it to process. How about:
My hand tentatively reaches out to the bloody, silver handle. I turn it slowly.
Or something similar. It's just a suggestion.
Nice work.
Happy writing, friend
-sapphire
18Sapphy-SweetsI liked this update. I thoroughly enjoyed the description of the corpses.
Julie's desperation added to the severity of the situation.
Here is something I think should be revised:
"My hand tentatively reaches out and touches the bloody silver handle and turns."
This sentence is kind of a run-on. I had to reread it for it to process. How about:
My hand tentatively reaches out to the bloody, silver handle. I turn it slowly.
Or something similar. It's just a suggestion.
Nice work.
Happy writing, friend
-sapphire
12/29/2012 c2 Juniper Nox
Please please please continue this amazing story! The way you describe the hospital reminds me of the hospital in Doc Mortis, the fourth book in my favourite book series, invisible fiends. I think this should be published as an actual book because if I saw this in a bookshop, I would buy it straight away. This story gets five stars from me!
Please please please continue this amazing story! The way you describe the hospital reminds me of the hospital in Doc Mortis, the fourth book in my favourite book series, invisible fiends. I think this should be published as an actual book because if I saw this in a bookshop, I would buy it straight away. This story gets five stars from me!
12/28/2012 c1 Sapphy-Sweets
I liked the concept. Though when I read your summary, I could've sworn this was going to be a Walking Dead ripoff.
But it wasn't.
Your descriptions are balanced, with a good plot flow. Your grammar is fine. No harm there.
The ending sentence isn't a very good suspense instiller. It sounds more like you forgot a sentence. It's not bad, by any means, but perhaps you could have left us with a cliffhanger, or a dramatic emotional line. It just seemed lacking to me.
The rest was very interesting, however.
Great job. I will be following this story.
Happy writing, friend
-sapphire
I liked the concept. Though when I read your summary, I could've sworn this was going to be a Walking Dead ripoff.
But it wasn't.
Your descriptions are balanced, with a good plot flow. Your grammar is fine. No harm there.
The ending sentence isn't a very good suspense instiller. It sounds more like you forgot a sentence. It's not bad, by any means, but perhaps you could have left us with a cliffhanger, or a dramatic emotional line. It just seemed lacking to me.
The rest was very interesting, however.
Great job. I will be following this story.
Happy writing, friend
-sapphire