for Hammered4/5/2013 c10 
2heyitsstupidme
I liked this chapter a lot and it's good that they seem to get closer. Jason and Seb are amazing characters and I especially like reading their talks with each other. I guess I'm two days late, but happy belated birthday! I hope you had a great day.
2heyitsstupidmeI liked this chapter a lot and it's good that they seem to get closer. Jason and Seb are amazing characters and I especially like reading their talks with each other. I guess I'm two days late, but happy belated birthday! I hope you had a great day.
4/4/2013 c10 Tobi Is A Girl's Name
DROOOOOOLLLLLLLL . . . . *ahem*, well, now that I'm done having a massive brain-melt, I think I'll sit here quietly and wait for the next update . . . #_#
DROOOOOOLLLLLLLL . . . . *ahem*, well, now that I'm done having a massive brain-melt, I think I'll sit here quietly and wait for the next update . . . #_#
3/31/2013 c9 hi
Sounds like jason is Demisexual.
Sounds like jason is Demisexual.
4/2/2013 c6 6DirtyBooks
So I don't think this chapter is bad. You just need to go through it and clean up all the typos. I totally know what it's like, stressing over a chapter, but really, the actual content is great. Loved the scene with the animals-you really painted a picture. I also have this adorable image of that little parrot in Alex's hair.
6DirtyBooksSo I don't think this chapter is bad. You just need to go through it and clean up all the typos. I totally know what it's like, stressing over a chapter, but really, the actual content is great. Loved the scene with the animals-you really painted a picture. I also have this adorable image of that little parrot in Alex's hair.
4/2/2013 c4 DirtyBooks
Like the unique sister! She'll be a helpful character, I believe, in the construction of Sebastien's and Jason's relationship. The parrot is a nice reflection of her odd character. I also thank you for Sebastien's very realistic drowning-of-sorrow pity party thing. I'm so tired of all this "seme" and "uke" and "Oh, I'm always so composed just because I take men up the ass" BS, that this very human reaction is much appreciated. Jason's instinctive protection is also really touching, but is not so over-the-top that it seems forced. All around very genuine.
Like the unique sister! She'll be a helpful character, I believe, in the construction of Sebastien's and Jason's relationship. The parrot is a nice reflection of her odd character. I also thank you for Sebastien's very realistic drowning-of-sorrow pity party thing. I'm so tired of all this "seme" and "uke" and "Oh, I'm always so composed just because I take men up the ass" BS, that this very human reaction is much appreciated. Jason's instinctive protection is also really touching, but is not so over-the-top that it seems forced. All around very genuine.
4/2/2013 c3 DirtyBooks
I liked this chapter, and I think you "dumped info" on us in a very un-dumping kind of way, haha. The information was all very helpful in his development, and was integrated well. I also like the passive "tense" you use in this chapter. Rather than dragging his post-"I just had gay sex" reaction out, you moved over in it a very skillful and effective way. The friend you brought in was also very helpful in convincingly wrapping up Jason's pity party.
On a side note, I have a Jason too. A much different Jason-much different. But yeah. I was kind of like "Oh! Jason!" There are some tense typos in this chapter as well, so when you get the time you might want to read this over.
I liked this chapter, and I think you "dumped info" on us in a very un-dumping kind of way, haha. The information was all very helpful in his development, and was integrated well. I also like the passive "tense" you use in this chapter. Rather than dragging his post-"I just had gay sex" reaction out, you moved over in it a very skillful and effective way. The friend you brought in was also very helpful in convincingly wrapping up Jason's pity party.
On a side note, I have a Jason too. A much different Jason-much different. But yeah. I was kind of like "Oh! Jason!" There are some tense typos in this chapter as well, so when you get the time you might want to read this over.
4/2/2013 c2 DirtyBooks
So, I was a little wary when you that this story was an extension of a one-shot. Yeah, a lot of people can write a sexy one-shot, but how many of those understand actual development. So I was very impressed by how seamlessly you went into this chapter, and how realistic you were about it. I wouldn't have even known this was an extension if you hadn't mentioned it. Great development of character, and just awesome. I'm really liking this. Oh, you've got a few tense typos about in this chapter in the first that you might want to fix up. Just so you know. (:
So, I was a little wary when you that this story was an extension of a one-shot. Yeah, a lot of people can write a sexy one-shot, but how many of those understand actual development. So I was very impressed by how seamlessly you went into this chapter, and how realistic you were about it. I wouldn't have even known this was an extension if you hadn't mentioned it. Great development of character, and just awesome. I'm really liking this. Oh, you've got a few tense typos about in this chapter in the first that you might want to fix up. Just so you know. (:
4/2/2013 c1 DirtyBooks
This was great. The drunkeness was VERY convincing. I just love how easily you slip into his drunken mindset and how it alters his perception, bringing the reader in while still allowing us to have the upper hand because we can see by comparison how truly wasted he really is. The sex was...well...sexy. I'm so excited whenever I find a good author on here. Keep on going with this one (unless it is already finished, haha).
This was great. The drunkeness was VERY convincing. I just love how easily you slip into his drunken mindset and how it alters his perception, bringing the reader in while still allowing us to have the upper hand because we can see by comparison how truly wasted he really is. The sex was...well...sexy. I'm so excited whenever I find a good author on here. Keep on going with this one (unless it is already finished, haha).
3/31/2013 c9 8DawnSister
Aw, I love this story. Isn't it a great feeling when you write a oneshot and you realise that you have such a connection with the characters that you can extend it?
I love these two, and they get better with every chapter.
As for the anonymous reviewer that is giving you trouble: It's not as if there isn't a fair warning of the content. It's not as if they are being forced to read this story. Flamers suck, but you've got to wonder what kind of boring life they must have to have the time to trawl through the millions of stories on this site to find one that is obviously not for them in order to complain about it. Get a life is what I say.
Looking forward to the next instalment.
DS
8DawnSisterAw, I love this story. Isn't it a great feeling when you write a oneshot and you realise that you have such a connection with the characters that you can extend it?
I love these two, and they get better with every chapter.
As for the anonymous reviewer that is giving you trouble: It's not as if there isn't a fair warning of the content. It's not as if they are being forced to read this story. Flamers suck, but you've got to wonder what kind of boring life they must have to have the time to trawl through the millions of stories on this site to find one that is obviously not for them in order to complain about it. Get a life is what I say.
Looking forward to the next instalment.
DS
3/23/2013 c8 2starryeyedd
so well-written. i love this. they have such amazing chemistry. keep up the excellent work and please update again asap! :)
2starryeyeddso well-written. i love this. they have such amazing chemistry. keep up the excellent work and please update again asap! :)
3/22/2013 c8 2heyitsstupidme
I usually like it more when they don't have sex that early in the story, but I like this story, especially the way you describe the character's emotions. I also like that it is not just fluffy, but not constantly dramatic either. The main characters, Sebastien and Jason, are definitely the most important ones, but I like that you give other characters, like Alex and Jay, an important role. I look forward to more and I can't wait to get to know the characters better. :)
2heyitsstupidmeI usually like it more when they don't have sex that early in the story, but I like this story, especially the way you describe the character's emotions. I also like that it is not just fluffy, but not constantly dramatic either. The main characters, Sebastien and Jason, are definitely the most important ones, but I like that you give other characters, like Alex and Jay, an important role. I look forward to more and I can't wait to get to know the characters better. :)
3/17/2013 c7 8DawnSister
Oh Em Eff Gee. This story is so hot. I love these characters and that they have such a good grounding with backgrounds hinted at and tantalizing us from between the lines.
I just read all your chapters so far without reviewing since I couldn't stop for a breath. I love it and I will definitely be waiting with bated breath to read the next update.
I tend to put A/N at the beginning and the end depending on what I need to say. Usually at the beginning it includes an apology for the length of times between updates.
Looking forward to the next chapter,
DS
8DawnSisterOh Em Eff Gee. This story is so hot. I love these characters and that they have such a good grounding with backgrounds hinted at and tantalizing us from between the lines.
I just read all your chapters so far without reviewing since I couldn't stop for a breath. I love it and I will definitely be waiting with bated breath to read the next update.
I tend to put A/N at the beginning and the end depending on what I need to say. Usually at the beginning it includes an apology for the length of times between updates.
Looking forward to the next chapter,
DS