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1/17/2013 c1 14VERGILthefallen
i am sorry someone has not review this already. Thsi is really good. And i'ma prick, and i'm saying this is good. You have such a nice story, written with a smooth suave voice, very journal like as if i was reading a piece out of a new paper or magazine on these people. You do get a little too formal at one time or another where it seems the vocab is higher that is needed but that is nothing. This story is cute, simple, with just enough detail to paint the picture and keep teh action moving. Well done.
If i have to say something, the paragraph about their son's apperence seemed to come out of nowhere, i feel it should have come a bit earlier, but other than that, well done. This was very nice and sweet.

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