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for The End of Us

1/26/2013 c1 5Keerasee
I really like this, especially the line "Already in mourning/For what we once were" - it has a lovely flow and packs an emotional punch. There's a typo in the first verse though, it says "looked in you eyes" instead of "your". Also, some punctuation at the end of each line would help the flow. Those are pretty minor points though, and overall I really liked it. Keep writing!

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