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6/8/2013 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
I really loved the repetition of ‘keep your silence, friend.’ It’s such a snarky thing to say in the first place, but I also think it’s great how you play up the word ‘friend’ and turn it into an insult. I also like the irony of that usage as well; none of that bitterness is lost on the reader.

Ideally I would have liked to see a bit more back-story as to what this ‘frenemy’ did to make this friendship so icy, however I don’t think going that route would correspond to the current style that you’re working with for the poem. I would suggest hinting at something underneath the surface though. Great job overall. Keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.
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What does it men ...it is good

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