for The Mending of a Heart6/26/2014 c12 Abbey
I started reading this assuming that it'll mainly revolve around May and Trent. So I was honestly a bit worried that I'll find the POVs of other characters boring in comparison. I eventually found it pretty interesting once I figured out how all these people are tied together.
Btw, I'm starting to find Abeline's romance more interesring than that of May and Trent.
I started reading this assuming that it'll mainly revolve around May and Trent. So I was honestly a bit worried that I'll find the POVs of other characters boring in comparison. I eventually found it pretty interesting once I figured out how all these people are tied together.
Btw, I'm starting to find Abeline's romance more interesring than that of May and Trent.
5/2/2014 c30 jet
really like your story I read it because I like trent
really like your story I read it because I like trent
4/28/2014 c8 jet
f*** in finally
f*** in finally
97/7/2013 c27 Guest
Another thing I would say is don't rush :)
As much as I love a quick update, I know creativity flows fast but attention to detail and adjustments take a little more time
Would I wait an hour for homemade pasta over five minutes for pot noodles? Yup you betcha.
Another thing I would say is don't rush :)
As much as I love a quick update, I know creativity flows fast but attention to detail and adjustments take a little more time
Would I wait an hour for homemade pasta over five minutes for pot noodles? Yup you betcha.
7/7/2013 c27 Guest
Okay, so I really did enjoy this story. I would say the focus on so many characters can be a bit much, I do love Abeline and I like Braiden's character but I think it gets a bit much when u put all their sections and other characters like Riven/May/Trent into one chapter. I think you were trying to cover all perspectives but sometimes switching so many POVs at once can make the reader lose focus on the main characters and plot
Anyway, other than that nice work :) I look forward to Abeline's story.. I hope she rips Roy's balls off
Okay, so I really did enjoy this story. I would say the focus on so many characters can be a bit much, I do love Abeline and I like Braiden's character but I think it gets a bit much when u put all their sections and other characters like Riven/May/Trent into one chapter. I think you were trying to cover all perspectives but sometimes switching so many POVs at once can make the reader lose focus on the main characters and plot
Anyway, other than that nice work :) I look forward to Abeline's story.. I hope she rips Roy's balls off
7/7/2013 c22 Guest
Stupid May, stupid Trent :[
Stupid May, stupid Trent :[
7/7/2013 c16 Guest
:) so you are planning on writing about Abeline. It made me laugh seeing that authors note, the irony. Well I look forward to it..
On with the story
:) so you are planning on writing about Abeline. It made me laugh seeing that authors note, the irony. Well I look forward to it..
On with the story
7/7/2013 c14 Guest
Hiya, so far I really love Abeline. So much so that I kind of wish the whole story was based on her alone :D
Now on with the story
Hiya, so far I really love Abeline. So much so that I kind of wish the whole story was based on her alone :D
Now on with the story
7/7/2013 c21 AKhwab
As draggy as I feel your story is getting, I still cannot help but wish that you actually didn't branch off with Ranger and Abeline.
As draggy as I feel your story is getting, I still cannot help but wish that you actually didn't branch off with Ranger and Abeline.
7/7/2013 c14 AKhwab
I want to know more about Abeline and Ranger than Trent and May now. I kinda hate it that May is such a damsel-in-distress.
I want to know more about Abeline and Ranger than Trent and May now. I kinda hate it that May is such a damsel-in-distress.
7/7/2013 c2 AKhwab
The last part was over-dramatic. By that, i mean that Smith over-reacted. Abeline & Trent are treating Mabel like some glass statue. I have got a few questions. Who is Barbara to Riven & Trent? Who is Riven to Trent? Who is Anthony to Trent?
The last part was over-dramatic. By that, i mean that Smith over-reacted. Abeline & Trent are treating Mabel like some glass statue. I have got a few questions. Who is Barbara to Riven & Trent? Who is Riven to Trent? Who is Anthony to Trent?
7/7/2013 c27 smashthat
I'm not sure how I really feel about the story. I can agree it was good,and even well writen but I just think you have too much going on in one story. Now there is a cliffhanger about 4 or 5 other people. But other than that it was good.
I'm not sure how I really feel about the story. I can agree it was good,and even well writen but I just think you have too much going on in one story. Now there is a cliffhanger about 4 or 5 other people. But other than that it was good.