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for There was a dark, dark wood

2/13/2013 c1 Fo
This is an interesting start. Why so short though? I'm always intrigue by other young writers like myself, but just for future reference it is better to show, instead of telling.

Like that first line you tell the audience "It was a very eerie place..." That's good and all, but if you had described what elements gave the place an eerie feel, that would have been great.

I love how you opened up the story "Matias wandered through the mossy, wet forest with tongues of mist curling through it", fantastic imagery. I saw that tongue of mist in my head and I think that's good for a horror story (any story really).

I hope this review was helpful.

-Fo

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