for Things Unseen3/31/2013 c1 
99Dreamers-Requiem
I think blind characters can be very hard to write. It's hard to tell how he knew she was upset; how did he know she was crying before he caught the tear? You may want to slow the pace down, spend a little bit more on descriptions and reactions. As it is, it feels like it moves fast from one thing to the other. There's not much build up, really, especially to the kiss; it feels very out of the blue, especially if they've been friends for so long. So, yeah, my main suggestion would be to slow it down a bit - it would really strengthen the story. Good luck.
99Dreamers-RequiemI think blind characters can be very hard to write. It's hard to tell how he knew she was upset; how did he know she was crying before he caught the tear? You may want to slow the pace down, spend a little bit more on descriptions and reactions. As it is, it feels like it moves fast from one thing to the other. There's not much build up, really, especially to the kiss; it feels very out of the blue, especially if they've been friends for so long. So, yeah, my main suggestion would be to slow it down a bit - it would really strengthen the story. Good luck.