4/1/2013 c1 99Dreamers-Requiem
I feel like there could have been more to this. The ending could have been a lot stronger, if you focused a bit more on her emotions on seeing her brother. Maybe a little more build up, too? I feel like, although there's a lot about Bryant, described by his sister, (and I know that's the point) we don't really get a strong idea of her. I feel like you could add a lot more to her. Play around with the POV, maybe, make her voice and personality just a bit stronger - that sort of thing can really add to the perception of Bryant, as we would see it a lot more through her eyes.
I do really like it, and it's an interesting exercise to see one character through the eyes of the other. Good job.