for Scissors for Red Strings4/28/2013 c1 Lucille-Hime
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Poor, Yoshiko-chan, it's must hurt not to have the red string of fate.
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Poor, Yoshiko-chan, it's must hurt not to have the red string of fate.
4/29/2013 c1 The 7th Flower-Violet Natalie
Wow, I've always loved the concept of the "Red Thread(s) of Fate" as a child.
Now, a scissor which is able to cut the strings, such an original and creative idea.
I really like how the speed is moderate, not fast or not to slow, and for a prologue, a chapter is usually very misused, this is very good.
Keep on going, you rock!
Luna
Wow, I've always loved the concept of the "Red Thread(s) of Fate" as a child.
Now, a scissor which is able to cut the strings, such an original and creative idea.
I really like how the speed is moderate, not fast or not to slow, and for a prologue, a chapter is usually very misused, this is very good.
Keep on going, you rock!
Luna
4/18/2013 c1 
2KoriNeko18
Interesting. Your summary hooked me in-after all, who doesn't like a good story with some red strings and scissors?
The prologue was a good opening, though it seemed kind of slow, in my opinion.
Either way, I think you did well, and I can't wait to see more for this story!
2KoriNeko18Interesting. Your summary hooked me in-after all, who doesn't like a good story with some red strings and scissors?
The prologue was a good opening, though it seemed kind of slow, in my opinion.
Either way, I think you did well, and I can't wait to see more for this story!
4/2/2013 c1 4Princess Asaria
Hello there
First of all..."Ultimate Hipster Thanatos is an awesome name...O.o
Now let's get down to the real review.
I really like how you portrayed Yoshiko as a child. I can really see her as a playful and imaginative little girl through your showing not telling. Also the image of her mother and father made me think of those rich families who seemed shiny and beautiful on the outside but perhaps had some dark secret? Hmm...perhaps? ;)
You do a good job of writing! It really flows along I'm excited to see where this is going! You're story has definitely sparked my interest(:
4Princess AsariaHello there
First of all..."Ultimate Hipster Thanatos is an awesome name...O.o
Now let's get down to the real review.
I really like how you portrayed Yoshiko as a child. I can really see her as a playful and imaginative little girl through your showing not telling. Also the image of her mother and father made me think of those rich families who seemed shiny and beautiful on the outside but perhaps had some dark secret? Hmm...perhaps? ;)
You do a good job of writing! It really flows along I'm excited to see where this is going! You're story has definitely sparked my interest(:
3/26/2013 c1 3Miitharian
I've always appreciated the red string ...it gives a wonderful visual to the idea of soulmates. I can't help but wonder if Yoshiko's lack will lead to angst or adventure. Probably both (but I hope for the latter!)
3MiitharianI've always appreciated the red string ...it gives a wonderful visual to the idea of soulmates. I can't help but wonder if Yoshiko's lack will lead to angst or adventure. Probably both (but I hope for the latter!)
3/25/2013 c1 Noelicht
Ooh, an amazing concept; the red threads of fate and a scissor that can cut them, that's a completely unique approach to a good story!
The introduction was good; it instantly starts off with a result of mother-daughter spat which makes the reader curious on why it happened. And while I went on figuring that out, you've brought in the scissor. Your writing style has a nice touch and a smooth trail which makes me easy to follow. And within the sentences of what was happening, you pitched in self thoughts and feelings; another plus for this story! No grammar mistakes, by the way (not that I've seen).
Although I'm still yet to know more about the characters and their backgrounds, I can understand as this is just the first chapter. But this chapter alone is an interesting read. So I've decided to put this on follow. Looking forward for more soon!
Ooh, an amazing concept; the red threads of fate and a scissor that can cut them, that's a completely unique approach to a good story!
The introduction was good; it instantly starts off with a result of mother-daughter spat which makes the reader curious on why it happened. And while I went on figuring that out, you've brought in the scissor. Your writing style has a nice touch and a smooth trail which makes me easy to follow. And within the sentences of what was happening, you pitched in self thoughts and feelings; another plus for this story! No grammar mistakes, by the way (not that I've seen).
Although I'm still yet to know more about the characters and their backgrounds, I can understand as this is just the first chapter. But this chapter alone is an interesting read. So I've decided to put this on follow. Looking forward for more soon!