for Beginner's Friday Nights12/30/2013 c4 calamity jane
Oh yes, you go Ian! I like June too, she certainly knows how to handle her brother lol!
On to the next chapter.
Oh yes, you go Ian! I like June too, she certainly knows how to handle her brother lol!
On to the next chapter.
12/19/2013 c10 Fart Face
I discovered this a few days ago, and really like it. The Halloween party was great. At first I found going back in time to the Halloween during college confusing, mainly, because I wanted to stay in the present to find out if something would happen between Will and Ian. The only thing about this chapter I wasn't crazy about was when you borrowed Bill Cosby's schtick and it took me right out of the story for a bit. (and Jo and Paul's kids names made me think of Julia Roberts) I got back into it easily enough, I guess. But the story is good and you should stick to your own words and ideas.
Definitely looking forward to more :D
I discovered this a few days ago, and really like it. The Halloween party was great. At first I found going back in time to the Halloween during college confusing, mainly, because I wanted to stay in the present to find out if something would happen between Will and Ian. The only thing about this chapter I wasn't crazy about was when you borrowed Bill Cosby's schtick and it took me right out of the story for a bit. (and Jo and Paul's kids names made me think of Julia Roberts) I got back into it easily enough, I guess. But the story is good and you should stick to your own words and ideas.
Definitely looking forward to more :D
12/18/2013 c10 InsanityAndBeyond
. . .STORY.
ahemm... but seriously I read it in one go last night, meaning I went to bed preetttyy late, and loved every second.
It's really interesting, because Will and Ian seem to have had an almost personality-switch, so that in the beginning it confused me, until you expanded on the characters. I love both of them, and kinda realllly want Christian to disappear, though I can guess it'll be a little bit more complicated than that. I'm hoping Will gets a bit of his confidence and cheeky side back, he seems to be almost a bit dull at the moment, compared to his previous character. I was in hysterics over the halloween 2000 virgin trophy thing. cant wait for the next chapter :)
. . .STORY.
ahemm... but seriously I read it in one go last night, meaning I went to bed preetttyy late, and loved every second.
It's really interesting, because Will and Ian seem to have had an almost personality-switch, so that in the beginning it confused me, until you expanded on the characters. I love both of them, and kinda realllly want Christian to disappear, though I can guess it'll be a little bit more complicated than that. I'm hoping Will gets a bit of his confidence and cheeky side back, he seems to be almost a bit dull at the moment, compared to his previous character. I was in hysterics over the halloween 2000 virgin trophy thing. cant wait for the next chapter :)
12/17/2013 c10 
8K.L. Sweet
This story is so fun and I laugh so hard. I love William and Ian and everyone else. Which is almost troublesome because I don't want anyone to get hurt like Christian and Marin if things don't end up working out for them. Ahhh, it's such a wonderful story though. I hope you continue.
8K.L. SweetThis story is so fun and I laugh so hard. I love William and Ian and everyone else. Which is almost troublesome because I don't want anyone to get hurt like Christian and Marin if things don't end up working out for them. Ahhh, it's such a wonderful story though. I hope you continue.
12/6/2013 c10 2littlelil1991
I love this story. The idea of two old friends who got married and are now realizing that they are still married to each other is a great idea. I also love the build up of the characters and plot in general although their friends are a little weird in my opinion but still fun and interesting. I can't wait to see what else will happen for Ian and Will!
2littlelil1991I love this story. The idea of two old friends who got married and are now realizing that they are still married to each other is a great idea. I also love the build up of the characters and plot in general although their friends are a little weird in my opinion but still fun and interesting. I can't wait to see what else will happen for Ian and Will!
10/29/2013 c9 vcdwhite
You are an amazing writer... your work is so professionally written. You have a really good vocabulary and grammar. The construction of the story and building up of the plot is gradual and the conversations of the characters are realistic and spontaneous. The story, so far, leaves an impression of doubt on who will end up with whom as I have yet to see an obvious change in the relationship between the two protagonists whether it'll go to more romantic or stay platonic. I sure hope Will and Ian will end up together. If so it'll be the type of story that really shows true love as their love didn't start on impulse but rather shows how one person finds true love through a gradually developing emotion. Do I even make sense? LOL
I wonder what kind of life altering event you'll come up with for the two protagonists to realize their feelings. I'm super excited! :)
Good luck and keep writing!
You are an amazing writer... your work is so professionally written. You have a really good vocabulary and grammar. The construction of the story and building up of the plot is gradual and the conversations of the characters are realistic and spontaneous. The story, so far, leaves an impression of doubt on who will end up with whom as I have yet to see an obvious change in the relationship between the two protagonists whether it'll go to more romantic or stay platonic. I sure hope Will and Ian will end up together. If so it'll be the type of story that really shows true love as their love didn't start on impulse but rather shows how one person finds true love through a gradually developing emotion. Do I even make sense? LOL
I wonder what kind of life altering event you'll come up with for the two protagonists to realize their feelings. I'm super excited! :)
Good luck and keep writing!
10/29/2013 c8 MintyChapstick
Ahh, your writing is just really good. You totally get the sense that you know your characters so well. I looove the tension between Will and Ian. Great update!
Ahh, your writing is just really good. You totally get the sense that you know your characters so well. I looove the tension between Will and Ian. Great update!
7/22/2013 c7 MintyChapstick
I'm surprised you have so little follows/reviews on this story, it's really good. I love both main characters and all their interactions. You've really done a good job so far and I hope you plan on updating soon!
I'm surprised you have so little follows/reviews on this story, it's really good. I love both main characters and all their interactions. You've really done a good job so far and I hope you plan on updating soon!
6/20/2013 c7 Asha124
I love your story. All the characters are really well-written. I adore side characters like Clarke, Ben or Delilah, and I don't even hate Chris or Marin. It's hard to find a good story on fp but yours is definitely one of them. You are really talented. Hope you'll update soon :-)
I love your story. All the characters are really well-written. I adore side characters like Clarke, Ben or Delilah, and I don't even hate Chris or Marin. It's hard to find a good story on fp but yours is definitely one of them. You are really talented. Hope you'll update soon :-)
6/8/2013 c7 jo
I hope you haven't given up on this story because I am really enjoying it. I'm amazed that you haven't been getting more reviews. Cant wait for the next chapter so please update soon x
I hope you haven't given up on this story because I am really enjoying it. I'm amazed that you haven't been getting more reviews. Cant wait for the next chapter so please update soon x
5/3/2013 c1 erin.crawford83
Hello :-) I told you I'd get around to reading this eventually. I just finished the first chapter. I really like th way you've set things up here. And the conversations between Will and Ian amuse me.
I can't help but think I would feel the same about avant-garde jazz, though I'm not sure I could consider mariachi music soothing in any context, either. :-)
And now you've made me want to go to Vegas with my best friend and have special cookies. Sounds like they were having a good time. :-)
Hello :-) I told you I'd get around to reading this eventually. I just finished the first chapter. I really like th way you've set things up here. And the conversations between Will and Ian amuse me.
I can't help but think I would feel the same about avant-garde jazz, though I'm not sure I could consider mariachi music soothing in any context, either. :-)
And now you've made me want to go to Vegas with my best friend and have special cookies. Sounds like they were having a good time. :-)
4/25/2013 c5 ForeverWasteAway
So the main thing that stood out to me in this chapter is that you're really really good at describing food. No joke, I went to the kitchen to look for dessert as soon as I finished reading.
I think the story's progressing nicely. Christian and Marin both seem nice so it would suck to see them be heartbroken if Ian and Will end up together. But I still hope it happens.
Also on a slightly embarrassing side note. I've always thought it was "when the rhythm rhythm starts to play" which makes no sense but I never questioned it.
So the main thing that stood out to me in this chapter is that you're really really good at describing food. No joke, I went to the kitchen to look for dessert as soon as I finished reading.
I think the story's progressing nicely. Christian and Marin both seem nice so it would suck to see them be heartbroken if Ian and Will end up together. But I still hope it happens.
Also on a slightly embarrassing side note. I've always thought it was "when the rhythm rhythm starts to play" which makes no sense but I never questioned it.
4/6/2013 c1 ForeverWasteAway
The accidentally getting married plot is kind of cliche but I've never seen a male/male one before so this should be interesting! I like this a lot already and can't wait to read more. I like how you started the story with a conversation between the two characters (an intelligent conversation at that). I sometimes find stories tend to have the same routine introduction of the characters, names, ages, description of their appearance, etc etc. so yeah, you're a great writer and I hope you continue with this
The accidentally getting married plot is kind of cliche but I've never seen a male/male one before so this should be interesting! I like this a lot already and can't wait to read more. I like how you started the story with a conversation between the two characters (an intelligent conversation at that). I sometimes find stories tend to have the same routine introduction of the characters, names, ages, description of their appearance, etc etc. so yeah, you're a great writer and I hope you continue with this