for Living4/5/2013 c1 
13tamarkaph2013
You have a wonderful imagination and gift for writing. I think this would be better if wit were written in 3rd person, past tense.
ex. Leta sits vs. Leta sat... Their voices echo in the hallway vs. their voices echoed in the hallway.
13tamarkaph2013You have a wonderful imagination and gift for writing. I think this would be better if wit were written in 3rd person, past tense.
ex. Leta sits vs. Leta sat... Their voices echo in the hallway vs. their voices echoed in the hallway.