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9/16/2016 c10 Guest
I originally found this story on quotev... thought it was one of the best works there. Did you deactivate or something? Just curious. (o;
I originally found this story on quotev... thought it was one of the best works there. Did you deactivate or something? Just curious. (o;
9/8/2016 c1 
10Silent Will
Interesting start. Your style is quite unconventional, but I like it. I take it you were aiming for a stream-of-consciousness narrative with Eliott? This whole chapter sounded like him sardonically relating the chapter’s events to himself. I think you pulled it off pretty well.
I also enjoyed the air of mystery you set up around Eliott and Carrie. We can sense their two extremely different personalities and form judgments about their attitudes, but at this point we know almost nothing about them. It’ll be interesting to learn more.
I must say, I’m looking forward to seeing where you take these characters from here. They seem like an interesting pair, and I’m digging your writing style so far.
10Silent WillInteresting start. Your style is quite unconventional, but I like it. I take it you were aiming for a stream-of-consciousness narrative with Eliott? This whole chapter sounded like him sardonically relating the chapter’s events to himself. I think you pulled it off pretty well.
I also enjoyed the air of mystery you set up around Eliott and Carrie. We can sense their two extremely different personalities and form judgments about their attitudes, but at this point we know almost nothing about them. It’ll be interesting to learn more.
I must say, I’m looking forward to seeing where you take these characters from here. They seem like an interesting pair, and I’m digging your writing style so far.
8/6/2016 c8 KarasunoFan
I just read all 8 chapters and am looking forward to more.
I am just confused by the last portion and am hoping someone will clarify. Was Carrie sincerely happy that he did something so enthusiatic, the "Yaaaay' bit or was she being disingenuious. I don't understand the last sentence. Thanks
I just read all 8 chapters and am looking forward to more.
I am just confused by the last portion and am hoping someone will clarify. Was Carrie sincerely happy that he did something so enthusiatic, the "Yaaaay' bit or was she being disingenuious. I don't understand the last sentence. Thanks
8/5/2016 c8 4Flivelle
Oh, man. I can't find the 'next' button. Please tell me there's more! You should write moooooar. Oh you HAVE TO! Yes you do! Soooon. Cuz I canNOT waaaaiiiiittt~
4FlivelleOh, man. I can't find the 'next' button. Please tell me there's more! You should write moooooar. Oh you HAVE TO! Yes you do! Soooon. Cuz I canNOT waaaaiiiiittt~
8/5/2016 c7 Flivelle
I'm in freaking love with this story. Really I wonder how I ever caught on to it. It's amazing. You don't really find stuff like this easy. I'm lovin' it.
I'm in freaking love with this story. Really I wonder how I ever caught on to it. It's amazing. You don't really find stuff like this easy. I'm lovin' it.
8/5/2016 c3 Flivelle
Is he really that frightening? I mean the empty plagued desks around him- such a darling though. He thinks a lot.
Is he really that frightening? I mean the empty plagued desks around him- such a darling though. He thinks a lot.
8/5/2016 c1 Flivelle
It's beautiful. I really really like it. I love it that you're so bittersweet and philosophical at the same time. And I absolutely love Carrie and Elliot. They're both normal and then not. And it's amazing how you've moulded the first chapter to pique the readers' interest.
It's beautiful. I really really like it. I love it that you're so bittersweet and philosophical at the same time. And I absolutely love Carrie and Elliot. They're both normal and then not. And it's amazing how you've moulded the first chapter to pique the readers' interest.
3/22/2016 c1 Guest
I've read this the whole way through after clicking the link through TV tropes and it is really excellent. The characters are (thankfully) far from one-dimensional and the writing is fluid and interesting without being pretentious. Perhaps a little clarity on the narration (at times it seems 3rd person limited but also drifts into omniscient) would be helpful but any quibble I have with that is minor in the context of this well-written well thought-out story.
I've read this the whole way through after clicking the link through TV tropes and it is really excellent. The characters are (thankfully) far from one-dimensional and the writing is fluid and interesting without being pretentious. Perhaps a little clarity on the narration (at times it seems 3rd person limited but also drifts into omniscient) would be helpful but any quibble I have with that is minor in the context of this well-written well thought-out story.
3/12/2016 c1 9TotoDaDog
I really like this! Especially the quote at the beginning, it's so sweet! Anyway, I liked the way this started..especially the line "By the fifth, it became a lie." It really made me want to keep reading!
Anyway, loved it :) Keep writing!
-Toto
9TotoDaDogI really like this! Especially the quote at the beginning, it's so sweet! Anyway, I liked the way this started..especially the line "By the fifth, it became a lie." It really made me want to keep reading!
Anyway, loved it :) Keep writing!
-Toto
2/21/2016 c5 6Darth Zannacross
Mostly how shallow and self absorbed today's teenagers seem to be, ugh, well it seems Carrie and Elliott reunite, guess we will see if she can repent for her previous lying or just dig a deeper grave, we will see.
6Darth ZannacrossMostly how shallow and self absorbed today's teenagers seem to be, ugh, well it seems Carrie and Elliott reunite, guess we will see if she can repent for her previous lying or just dig a deeper grave, we will see.