for Roses4/19/2013 c1 
9crywolf-girl23
Nice imagery you have there. I like how you describe each scene and the way time passes smoothly. Although the last sentence sounds a bit off, like it doesn't fit the rhythm of the poem. Consider to write it in another way maybe? Also in the line 'And see the green begin to resurface' something doesn't feel right. The 'begin' is bugging me for some reason.
9crywolf-girl23Nice imagery you have there. I like how you describe each scene and the way time passes smoothly. Although the last sentence sounds a bit off, like it doesn't fit the rhythm of the poem. Consider to write it in another way maybe? Also in the line 'And see the green begin to resurface' something doesn't feel right. The 'begin' is bugging me for some reason.