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1Nori-san
The Cerberus finally reveals himself before the cast in a vengeance streak! As usual, your skill in displaying the different scenes is what makes your work unique and also your style as a writer. I wonder how the fight will work out and then there's Onuris as well, and not forgetting Recreo's fight with Cavus!
1Nori-sanThe Cerberus finally reveals himself before the cast in a vengeance streak! As usual, your skill in displaying the different scenes is what makes your work unique and also your style as a writer. I wonder how the fight will work out and then there's Onuris as well, and not forgetting Recreo's fight with Cavus!
1/4/2014 c45 Nori-san
Okay I'm up for another round of review! The story is heating up and supposedly I wanted to review the previous chapter before carrying on but it's just too exciting! Nice play of scenes happening simultaneously between the many different casts. The revelation of Cavus to Recreo, to Glaice and Chasm, and lastly towards the female casts. What I actually feel about Aegis being injured is that Cane's character in this part is a little weak. They are mother and daughter, no? But the way Cane reacts could have been more exaggerated. When she commented about the wolf being a pervert, it makes her somewhat care less of what's actually happening to her child in front of her. Other than that, the revelation made by Divum truly draws the curtain towards the approaching finale (am I right?) great job nonetheless, I'm glad that time has allowed me to read this wonderful piece of work ! Until next time!
Okay I'm up for another round of review! The story is heating up and supposedly I wanted to review the previous chapter before carrying on but it's just too exciting! Nice play of scenes happening simultaneously between the many different casts. The revelation of Cavus to Recreo, to Glaice and Chasm, and lastly towards the female casts. What I actually feel about Aegis being injured is that Cane's character in this part is a little weak. They are mother and daughter, no? But the way Cane reacts could have been more exaggerated. When she commented about the wolf being a pervert, it makes her somewhat care less of what's actually happening to her child in front of her. Other than that, the revelation made by Divum truly draws the curtain towards the approaching finale (am I right?) great job nonetheless, I'm glad that time has allowed me to read this wonderful piece of work ! Until next time!
1/4/2014 c43 Nori-san
Well, I suppose a review per chapter would be good instead of me giving a long brief one over a few chapters.
Finally, some free time for myself! Got myself to re-read the chapters again to refresh myself and what am I actually reading? Ab and lycus...HAS A CHILD? Onuris seems to be stirring a storm again and this time, the family conflict heats up! Well, I gotta read on to find out more now!
Well, I suppose a review per chapter would be good instead of me giving a long brief one over a few chapters.
Finally, some free time for myself! Got myself to re-read the chapters again to refresh myself and what am I actually reading? Ab and lycus...HAS A CHILD? Onuris seems to be stirring a storm again and this time, the family conflict heats up! Well, I gotta read on to find out more now!
12/9/2013 c42 Nori-san
It's seriously been a long time since I've reviewed and once again, I apologize for the lack of time on my side. Now, back to the story shall we?
Rereading the past chapters took a while and now that I'm here, I guess I'm too late if I were to say the writing's good as always, no? I believe the later chapters will definitely be much more captivating than the previous and the introduction of Phasma...CAUTES? Holy, I'm missing out a lot here, aren't i?
Great job as always! I'll read up again when time allows!
It's seriously been a long time since I've reviewed and once again, I apologize for the lack of time on my side. Now, back to the story shall we?
Rereading the past chapters took a while and now that I'm here, I guess I'm too late if I were to say the writing's good as always, no? I believe the later chapters will definitely be much more captivating than the previous and the introduction of Phasma...CAUTES? Holy, I'm missing out a lot here, aren't i?
Great job as always! I'll read up again when time allows!
9/1/2013 c41 InfiniteMaze
Nice to have another chapter! And don't worry- take all the time you need to update :)
Of course this chapter was well written, I liked creos meeting and the mention of his mother alula.
Keep up the great work!
Nice to have another chapter! And don't worry- take all the time you need to update :)
Of course this chapter was well written, I liked creos meeting and the mention of his mother alula.
Keep up the great work!
8/19/2013 c40 Nori-san
C-c-c-cane's got a daughter? Sneaky Chasm eh. Great insight you've shed in this chapter and I see some innuendo between Anhur and Rasant and as always, Rasant playing the straight guy. Really comical! Haha and by the end, a revelation of Anhur and Onuris' encounter! Wasn't expecting Onuris to have such a different characteristics in the past, but now it gets me wondering, why the change in the present?
Keep it up man! You sure know how to keep the bits of information and then shocking us when we least expect it huh? It was a pleasure following your work!
C-c-c-cane's got a daughter? Sneaky Chasm eh. Great insight you've shed in this chapter and I see some innuendo between Anhur and Rasant and as always, Rasant playing the straight guy. Really comical! Haha and by the end, a revelation of Anhur and Onuris' encounter! Wasn't expecting Onuris to have such a different characteristics in the past, but now it gets me wondering, why the change in the present?
Keep it up man! You sure know how to keep the bits of information and then shocking us when we least expect it huh? It was a pleasure following your work!
8/18/2013 c39 Nori-san
Terribly sorry for the late review! Been so engrossed with KH that even my story was left neglected too. But now that I've completed the game, it's time to resume writing and reading!
I honestly don't think your work has derailed in any sense, though I still find it strange for them to work so calmly together, or maybe I'm still hating Rimor for his personality.
Now comes the part that got me shocked and nearly choked on my drink.
ONURIS! And that Cerberus...is that who I think he is..?
While that leaves a question as to Onuris' allegiance and his true purpose, the next shocker comes with that hint you've given. Hmmm what exactly is Onuris now? And Cavus...he's definitely one of those antagonist, is it? Or maybe I'm jumping to conclusion too quickly.
All in all, great job as always! Loving every chapter you've churned out and I can't wait for the actual action to unfold!
Terribly sorry for the late review! Been so engrossed with KH that even my story was left neglected too. But now that I've completed the game, it's time to resume writing and reading!
I honestly don't think your work has derailed in any sense, though I still find it strange for them to work so calmly together, or maybe I'm still hating Rimor for his personality.
Now comes the part that got me shocked and nearly choked on my drink.
ONURIS! And that Cerberus...is that who I think he is..?
While that leaves a question as to Onuris' allegiance and his true purpose, the next shocker comes with that hint you've given. Hmmm what exactly is Onuris now? And Cavus...he's definitely one of those antagonist, is it? Or maybe I'm jumping to conclusion too quickly.
All in all, great job as always! Loving every chapter you've churned out and I can't wait for the actual action to unfold!
8/12/2013 c38 InfiniteMaze
A lovely start of the next part. It was good, I like the return of the third person :)
Looks intense, can't wait for more soon
A lovely start of the next part. It was good, I like the return of the third person :)
Looks intense, can't wait for more soon
8/11/2013 c38 Nori-san
Somehow when I read the chapter, I visualized a neon dark steampunkish city and the actions all animated like an anime series. Maybe it's because I was reading it when I was half awake. Haha imagine me grabbing the phone to scroll to the latest chapter when I received the notification!
Ok now, great action and for a moment I thought it was Creo's doing for the terrorist attack but it was those darn humans (right?)
Great visuals and exploring of the many different casts. Rimor is sadist as always (that's the image I get of him) but apparently he's standing on the same side with Recreo and the others now, or was I reading it wrongly? Correct me if so.
Now, now, I wonder what's the hype that got everyone of them so worked up? Perhaps the PMC would prove to be an interesting entry for this third part!
Somehow when I read the chapter, I visualized a neon dark steampunkish city and the actions all animated like an anime series. Maybe it's because I was reading it when I was half awake. Haha imagine me grabbing the phone to scroll to the latest chapter when I received the notification!
Ok now, great action and for a moment I thought it was Creo's doing for the terrorist attack but it was those darn humans (right?)
Great visuals and exploring of the many different casts. Rimor is sadist as always (that's the image I get of him) but apparently he's standing on the same side with Recreo and the others now, or was I reading it wrongly? Correct me if so.
Now, now, I wonder what's the hype that got everyone of them so worked up? Perhaps the PMC would prove to be an interesting entry for this third part!
8/11/2013 c5 22Tenshi no Yami
Oh, how I've fallen behind in this story. Apologies.
Now then, I must say that when the Prince was reading off that least, I got worried for dear Recreo. Then you just had to throw in the word "dead" and make my jaw drop slightly. Creo soon came waltzing in making me wonder what exactly was Rim's intentions when he revealed that information to her.
I will say that I do like Chasm and it's nice to see that he even has a fighter's name, though I would think Cane would at least know that he was one like Creo. Then again, the Lady must have more important manners to see to, ne?
The words with which the chapter was written are always descriptive, making the section a joy to read.
Keep it up and on to the next part
-TnY
22Tenshi no YamiOh, how I've fallen behind in this story. Apologies.
Now then, I must say that when the Prince was reading off that least, I got worried for dear Recreo. Then you just had to throw in the word "dead" and make my jaw drop slightly. Creo soon came waltzing in making me wonder what exactly was Rim's intentions when he revealed that information to her.
I will say that I do like Chasm and it's nice to see that he even has a fighter's name, though I would think Cane would at least know that he was one like Creo. Then again, the Lady must have more important manners to see to, ne?
The words with which the chapter was written are always descriptive, making the section a joy to read.
Keep it up and on to the next part
-TnY
8/11/2013 c37 1Nori-san
What are you even talking about? Your writing is still as superb as ever and I believe all the other readers think the same way as I do as well!
AS you've did in part 1, you have managed to nail the ending for part 2 well too and I can't believe you actually did it, killing off my waffle girl...but it very well constructed, your writing clearly illustrated the story like a motion picture in my head. I believe you are the first writer that I've ever came across to write a main character that's literally against the entire casts in an all out combat, making it difficult to say which side was right and clearly, you had my mind full of thoughts after finishing the chapter. Abby sure is one sad kid. Just as he was about to move on and embrace the world with his family and friends, his body had to reject that wish. Really heartbreaking at the end and great job as always! I'll be waiting for part 3 and I wonder if it spells the end of Onuris by then too!
1Nori-sanWhat are you even talking about? Your writing is still as superb as ever and I believe all the other readers think the same way as I do as well!
AS you've did in part 1, you have managed to nail the ending for part 2 well too and I can't believe you actually did it, killing off my waffle girl...but it very well constructed, your writing clearly illustrated the story like a motion picture in my head. I believe you are the first writer that I've ever came across to write a main character that's literally against the entire casts in an all out combat, making it difficult to say which side was right and clearly, you had my mind full of thoughts after finishing the chapter. Abby sure is one sad kid. Just as he was about to move on and embrace the world with his family and friends, his body had to reject that wish. Really heartbreaking at the end and great job as always! I'll be waiting for part 3 and I wonder if it spells the end of Onuris by then too!
8/10/2013 c37 InfiniteMaze
What an epic conclusion! Where do I even begin?
I don't think I have mentioned this- but something you write really well is the fight scenes. I always know exactly what's going on, and you give me a great visual in my mind as to what's happening.
The next thing is the character development- especially Abby. He was just a regular teen when this part started. But now- he has grown so much! He learned about himself, and has been through loss. He became darker, and more aware of the world. I liked seeing how he has changed and grew as a character.
That being said, I'm really starting to care for these characters. I know I've said I liked Chasm (:p) but all of them have so much to offer. That's why when they get hurt, or die, I get excited and or worried about them- just as I do when I read an actual published novel. (I also really felt sad when lycus died. You wrote Abby's emotions so well; I couldn't help but actually feel sad.)
I think those are the major thoughts I wanted to point out, but wow. I know I may not have reviewed as much, but don't get me wrong, I sincerely loved this part. I liked the plot, and the new characters, and you write splendidly in first person. Your writing DID NOT decrease in value, your writing and story is still going great and strong.
I'm excited to finish this story- I can't wait to see how this plot progresses even more.
I can't wait to begin reading the third part.
Keep up the good work. :)
What an epic conclusion! Where do I even begin?
I don't think I have mentioned this- but something you write really well is the fight scenes. I always know exactly what's going on, and you give me a great visual in my mind as to what's happening.
The next thing is the character development- especially Abby. He was just a regular teen when this part started. But now- he has grown so much! He learned about himself, and has been through loss. He became darker, and more aware of the world. I liked seeing how he has changed and grew as a character.
That being said, I'm really starting to care for these characters. I know I've said I liked Chasm (:p) but all of them have so much to offer. That's why when they get hurt, or die, I get excited and or worried about them- just as I do when I read an actual published novel. (I also really felt sad when lycus died. You wrote Abby's emotions so well; I couldn't help but actually feel sad.)
I think those are the major thoughts I wanted to point out, but wow. I know I may not have reviewed as much, but don't get me wrong, I sincerely loved this part. I liked the plot, and the new characters, and you write splendidly in first person. Your writing DID NOT decrease in value, your writing and story is still going great and strong.
I'm excited to finish this story- I can't wait to see how this plot progresses even more.
I can't wait to begin reading the third part.
Keep up the good work. :)
8/8/2013 c36 Nori-san
Abby, Abby, Abby. A confused and lone wolf living in a world he thought was once familiar and comfortable but now a depressing facade. Throughout the entire part 2, we get to see Abby living a short but normal life that changed drastically when a werewolf strikes his school. One after another tell stories to him, cramming his head with information that he couldn't grasp. It's obvious and saddening to see that he would lose it. I believe the climax is coming, the curtains preparing to close as Abby seeks to find his answer and definite resolve through force, regardless who was once a friend or foe to him.
Great job and nicely written, your standard has constantly raise my expectation of your work and never once have I been disappointed! Can't wait to see this story to its end!
Abby, Abby, Abby. A confused and lone wolf living in a world he thought was once familiar and comfortable but now a depressing facade. Throughout the entire part 2, we get to see Abby living a short but normal life that changed drastically when a werewolf strikes his school. One after another tell stories to him, cramming his head with information that he couldn't grasp. It's obvious and saddening to see that he would lose it. I believe the climax is coming, the curtains preparing to close as Abby seeks to find his answer and definite resolve through force, regardless who was once a friend or foe to him.
Great job and nicely written, your standard has constantly raise my expectation of your work and never once have I been disappointed! Can't wait to see this story to its end!
8/8/2013 c36 InfiniteMaze
Gah Chasm! XD.
I really enjoyed he conversation Abby had with the others in the begging of the chapter. You really did a splendid job of writing the reluctant hero. I feel for these characters, I want things to end well for them. That's really good writing :)
Keep up the great work.
Gah Chasm! XD.
I really enjoyed he conversation Abby had with the others in the begging of the chapter. You really did a splendid job of writing the reluctant hero. I feel for these characters, I want things to end well for them. That's really good writing :)
Keep up the great work.
8/7/2013 c35 Nori-san
Ya see, I knew it! Argh how could you my waffle girl? Well, I guess she does have her reason to do that since that cunning pinkie did watch her grow up though I'm curious...how did waffle girl turn into that fur coat? Was she a human before meeting him or perhaps she already is a werewolf?
Emotional chapter, though I really believe you could bring out more of the feelings. That part about her slapping him? Well, I was thinking since you're telling the story in real time instead of telling it like someone reminiscing the past (which is what I assumed based on your writing style) , perhaps you could phrase 'she slapped me' in another way- maybe having Abby feel a sting, his head turned away from the impact of her slap. Having said 'slap' doesn't really bring out the effect well but that's just my thought. Other than that, I love this chapter as much as the previous and keep it up!
Ya see, I knew it! Argh how could you my waffle girl? Well, I guess she does have her reason to do that since that cunning pinkie did watch her grow up though I'm curious...how did waffle girl turn into that fur coat? Was she a human before meeting him or perhaps she already is a werewolf?
Emotional chapter, though I really believe you could bring out more of the feelings. That part about her slapping him? Well, I was thinking since you're telling the story in real time instead of telling it like someone reminiscing the past (which is what I assumed based on your writing style) , perhaps you could phrase 'she slapped me' in another way- maybe having Abby feel a sting, his head turned away from the impact of her slap. Having said 'slap' doesn't really bring out the effect well but that's just my thought. Other than that, I love this chapter as much as the previous and keep it up!