for Memento Mori: Downfall5/31/2013 c11 InfiniteMaze
The last few chapters have been great! Creos character is really picking up, and his plot line keeps surprising me. Good job!
But If anything, when you're narration goes from one set of characters to another (from cane and chasm to creo and his wife) you can consider using the line breaks. It's no big deal, I just have to re-read sometimes when the story jumps from one place to another.
Keep up the good work! I love this story :)
The last few chapters have been great! Creos character is really picking up, and his plot line keeps surprising me. Good job!
But If anything, when you're narration goes from one set of characters to another (from cane and chasm to creo and his wife) you can consider using the line breaks. It's no big deal, I just have to re-read sometimes when the story jumps from one place to another.
Keep up the good work! I love this story :)
5/15/2013 c7 InfiniteMaze
I like how this ended with a cliffhanger! It's very intense.
This story is very well written, I will say again that you are very talented when it comes to describing the background and when introducing your characters. I feel like I'm in the story. (I also really like chasm, he seems pretty cool)
I can't wait to read the next chapter, and to find out more about creo. Keep up the good work, I have favorited. :)
I like how this ended with a cliffhanger! It's very intense.
This story is very well written, I will say again that you are very talented when it comes to describing the background and when introducing your characters. I feel like I'm in the story. (I also really like chasm, he seems pretty cool)
I can't wait to read the next chapter, and to find out more about creo. Keep up the good work, I have favorited. :)
4/23/2013 c3 InfiniteMaze
Thank you for the fast update!
And that was a pretty good chapter, the plot seems to be picking up. Overall, you did a great job writing this- I also really like Cane, she's a strong, likable main character.
Keep up the good work :)
Thank you for the fast update!
And that was a pretty good chapter, the plot seems to be picking up. Overall, you did a great job writing this- I also really like Cane, she's a strong, likable main character.
Keep up the good work :)
4/22/2013 c2 InfiniteMaze
This story is very interesting- I like it a lot.
You're very good at describing things, whether it's a room or an appearance. The dialogue is well written, the speech fits well with the character.
I can't wait to read more, I hope you update soon.
This story is very interesting- I like it a lot.
You're very good at describing things, whether it's a room or an appearance. The dialogue is well written, the speech fits well with the character.
I can't wait to read more, I hope you update soon.