for Controlled12/25/2014 c3 Guest
MORE PLEASE :3
MORE PLEASE :3
8/21/2014 c1 camph2o
Hey! I totally love your writing style, and this story is super legit! CANT WAIT for the update!
Hey! I totally love your writing style, and this story is super legit! CANT WAIT for the update!
2/7/2014 c3 Roger Jaminson
The story is real nice. I've read it 4 times. When are you going to update?
The story is real nice. I've read it 4 times. When are you going to update?
1/9/2014 c3 teacher abit
Why do you always leave me wanting more! God do they get together or not?
Why do you always leave me wanting more! God do they get together or not?
12/28/2013 c3 Hope to see more
I read a few of your other short stories first but this definitely has to be my favorite one. Chris has just the right amount of arrogance that can't make you hate him while Daniel's innocence is charming. I was rather afraid that he would turn out too girly but for just three chapters, the character development is really believeable. I would love to see you continue with the story...will be waiting.
I read a few of your other short stories first but this definitely has to be my favorite one. Chris has just the right amount of arrogance that can't make you hate him while Daniel's innocence is charming. I was rather afraid that he would turn out too girly but for just three chapters, the character development is really believeable. I would love to see you continue with the story...will be waiting.
10/17/2013 c3 
7One More Note
Yep, I noticed a few things.
In the last chapter Chrid mentioned room 2004, and in this chapter it became 204. That's one.
Second, this one:
"From my new perspective above I stare down at Chris' golden dace. He looks up at me, his ecpression indiscernable. One hand caressed the side of my cheek. Without warning, his tongue slips into my mouth, and I gasp at the intensity of the kiss. I clutch at his chest weakly, the material of his shirt bunching in m grasp."
The the 'm' is there, and then... At the beginning of the chapter, when Chris opened the door, he was shirtless.
And the chapter is still as amazing as ever.
Anyway, I haven't got any updates in a long time! We miss you, you know!
;)
7One More NoteYep, I noticed a few things.
In the last chapter Chrid mentioned room 2004, and in this chapter it became 204. That's one.
Second, this one:
"From my new perspective above I stare down at Chris' golden dace. He looks up at me, his ecpression indiscernable. One hand caressed the side of my cheek. Without warning, his tongue slips into my mouth, and I gasp at the intensity of the kiss. I clutch at his chest weakly, the material of his shirt bunching in m grasp."
The the 'm' is there, and then... At the beginning of the chapter, when Chris opened the door, he was shirtless.
And the chapter is still as amazing as ever.
Anyway, I haven't got any updates in a long time! We miss you, you know!
;)
8/7/2013 c3 Sutekie13
I hope you are going to add more chapters to this story, it's an interesting story line that you don't see everyday
I hope you are going to add more chapters to this story, it's an interesting story line that you don't see everyday
8/6/2013 c3 4GrangerDanger333
You write very good smexyness ;D I would love to read some more!
And relating to what you said about The Prisoner: liking to see beautiful yaoi boys getting broken... Well I'll join that club! It's so wrong but if it's written well, it's so good! :)
4GrangerDanger333You write very good smexyness ;D I would love to read some more!
And relating to what you said about The Prisoner: liking to see beautiful yaoi boys getting broken... Well I'll join that club! It's so wrong but if it's written well, it's so good! :)
7/15/2013 c3 6TheChosenDhova
All your characters are so cute and mischeivous (well one of them ;)) I really love it so far! I can't wait to read more! Yes, and am VERY obsessed with smexyness :)
6TheChosenDhovaAll your characters are so cute and mischeivous (well one of them ;)) I really love it so far! I can't wait to read more! Yes, and am VERY obsessed with smexyness :)
6/24/2013 c3 1Reservoir
KMN.
Wow.
You this has exactly the right bit of reality and fiction. I mean the way its written makes it real, like I'm feeling it, but not quite feeling it, which leaves room for imagination. So I raise my (invisible) hat to you. And salute.
(YES YES YES YES I WANT MORE OF IT)
Okay when I think of Daniel Collins I go: Oh a 33 year old cutie *squeal* *squeal* *squeal*
And when I think of Christopher Jenkins : Its like I feel prickly all over my skin and kind of warm
And when I think of Jason: *nod nod* He's kind of cute.
PLEEASE continue this. I will worship you.
1ReservoirKMN.
Wow.
You this has exactly the right bit of reality and fiction. I mean the way its written makes it real, like I'm feeling it, but not quite feeling it, which leaves room for imagination. So I raise my (invisible) hat to you. And salute.
(YES YES YES YES I WANT MORE OF IT)
Okay when I think of Daniel Collins I go: Oh a 33 year old cutie *squeal* *squeal* *squeal*
And when I think of Christopher Jenkins : Its like I feel prickly all over my skin and kind of warm
And when I think of Jason: *nod nod* He's kind of cute.
PLEEASE continue this. I will worship you.
6/24/2013 c2 Reservoir
Okay, I think I spotted a mistake.
The part when Jason tells Mr Collins that he's cute, Daniel thinks "What am, releasing teenage-boy pheromones?" I don't understand the 'what am.'
Oh and you referred to Jason as Jackson in another line.
APART FROM THAT.
*party* I'm enjoying this so much. A HUGE thank you to you!
Okay, I think I spotted a mistake.
The part when Jason tells Mr Collins that he's cute, Daniel thinks "What am, releasing teenage-boy pheromones?" I don't understand the 'what am.'
Oh and you referred to Jason as Jackson in another line.
APART FROM THAT.
*party* I'm enjoying this so much. A HUGE thank you to you!