4/30/2013 c1 2dcflag
Really liked the idea of the story. Would perhaps get rid of the last sentence, I don't think it needs it, The premise is really original, I love little shorts like this and I'm glad I read this.

4/28/2013 c1 EverlastingBlueSkyXD
Last line, so true. :) Very few mistakes, really minor this time.