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5/26/2013 c1 172DefineBeauty
I'm not sue if it's intentional or not, but several times you put "a" instead of "an" which would be my dislike for this piece, especially if it's intentional because it messes up the flow.

I do however like the feeling of fear and labored breathing and means of escape that I feel from this. I'm not sure if it's because of a good relationship gone bad or a different typeof situation, but the emotion is there. it's like you can envision the scene in your head going down in slow motion. it's an eerie picture painted well.

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