for The Other One6/2/2014 c1 Guest
The grammar is my only complaint. I really like this story, how it's paced and the plot. Keep up the work!
The grammar is my only complaint. I really like this story, how it's paced and the plot. Keep up the work!
1/24/2014 c1 
4Veronica Fay
Hi! This was really great! I enjoyed it a lot! It's missing a few periods, but still great :)
-Veronica
4Veronica FayHi! This was really great! I enjoyed it a lot! It's missing a few periods, but still great :)
-Veronica
7/7/2013 c1 Guest
Even though its not the best grammar (not that I give a crap because grammar is hard in general) I understood the story immediately. I love this story it gets me everytime I read it even when I read this a over 10 times :P One of my top favourites
Even though its not the best grammar (not that I give a crap because grammar is hard in general) I understood the story immediately. I love this story it gets me everytime I read it even when I read this a over 10 times :P One of my top favourites
6/9/2013 c1 Guest
You don't really have the best grammar, but somehow I really liked the story. It was blunt, to the point and interesting. You should work on improving your writing but keep up with the good ideas :)
You don't really have the best grammar, but somehow I really liked the story. It was blunt, to the point and interesting. You should work on improving your writing but keep up with the good ideas :)