for Edited5/31/2013 c1 
78Elizabeth Clayton
This was very busy, the flow was good, i agree, and i like the poem itself but if i'm being honest, which i always want you to be with me, i'm going to have to say I think the format distracted from the poem itself a bit, I was caught up in how I should be reading it, if I was doing it right, instead of feeling it. When i pushed that aside, then I enjoyed it greatly. Anyway, just my opinion, you know i love you! and i think your are fantastic! And hey, it does look very cool!
78Elizabeth ClaytonThis was very busy, the flow was good, i agree, and i like the poem itself but if i'm being honest, which i always want you to be with me, i'm going to have to say I think the format distracted from the poem itself a bit, I was caught up in how I should be reading it, if I was doing it right, instead of feeling it. When i pushed that aside, then I enjoyed it greatly. Anyway, just my opinion, you know i love you! and i think your are fantastic! And hey, it does look very cool!