for agora and9/29/2014 c1 Autumn's Emie
this was beautiful in a sad, emotional way. i love your descriptions so much.
this was beautiful in a sad, emotional way. i love your descriptions so much.
8/16/2014 c1 Toto and Dino
Aw! I loved it so much! So the girl is agoraphobic? Anyway I like the word choices and the flow of it and everything. This is a real love story now. XD Awesome, awesome job! :)
Aw! I loved it so much! So the girl is agoraphobic? Anyway I like the word choices and the flow of it and everything. This is a real love story now. XD Awesome, awesome job! :)
8/10/2014 c1 Julietish
A Drop of Romeo has reviewed your story. This is a little late, but congrats, and here's the review:
This story hurts. Bad. There are no big fights or heartbreaks, but it has this faint aura of melancholy weaved throughout the narrative, strong enough to leave me feeling hollow. That being said, you should totally read it!
It's about an agoraphobic girl named Evie and the boy who's in love with her, Corey. Between the individual scenes, Evie's stream of consciousness reminds us that she's a real live person (in the story, at least). Her exterior is impermeable and almost cold, but her thoughts are frantic and rambling, revealing her dreams and wishes. Corey tries his best to help Evie, but there's a thick invisible wall separating the girl Corey loves and the girl she really is.
agora and has a simple, slow kind of sadness to it, the kind that you feel when it's 3 am and you're the only one awake. You can feel how desperately Evie wants to change, but it's almost impossible for her. I, personally, could relate to this, which is perhaps why I so strongly recommend this story. Otherwise, it may seem kind of bland and confusing. Corey is patient and understanding, but his frustration and humanness definitely get the better of him once in a while. He is a believable, likable character, who so clearly loves this girl who's at once terrified by and awed at the world.
I love quietly painful stories like this, but if you're having a really great, cheery day then you should steer clear. However, if you aren't afraid of or opposed to an introspective, almost bittersweet read then I definitely recommend agora and. Just don't say I didn't warn you.
A Drop of Romeo has reviewed your story. This is a little late, but congrats, and here's the review:
This story hurts. Bad. There are no big fights or heartbreaks, but it has this faint aura of melancholy weaved throughout the narrative, strong enough to leave me feeling hollow. That being said, you should totally read it!
It's about an agoraphobic girl named Evie and the boy who's in love with her, Corey. Between the individual scenes, Evie's stream of consciousness reminds us that she's a real live person (in the story, at least). Her exterior is impermeable and almost cold, but her thoughts are frantic and rambling, revealing her dreams and wishes. Corey tries his best to help Evie, but there's a thick invisible wall separating the girl Corey loves and the girl she really is.
agora and has a simple, slow kind of sadness to it, the kind that you feel when it's 3 am and you're the only one awake. You can feel how desperately Evie wants to change, but it's almost impossible for her. I, personally, could relate to this, which is perhaps why I so strongly recommend this story. Otherwise, it may seem kind of bland and confusing. Corey is patient and understanding, but his frustration and humanness definitely get the better of him once in a while. He is a believable, likable character, who so clearly loves this girl who's at once terrified by and awed at the world.
I love quietly painful stories like this, but if you're having a really great, cheery day then you should steer clear. However, if you aren't afraid of or opposed to an introspective, almost bittersweet read then I definitely recommend agora and. Just don't say I didn't warn you.
5/6/2014 c1 
6Carmel March
This couldn't be more perfect. It's absolutely stunning. It's original and heartbreaking and I just loved it. Thank you so much for writing this!
6Carmel MarchThis couldn't be more perfect. It's absolutely stunning. It's original and heartbreaking and I just loved it. Thank you so much for writing this!
11/26/2013 c1 Guest
This broke my heart. Gosh, the way you write is beautiful! I love the juxtaposition of Evie's thoughts next to her demeanor, it killed me even more because it made her not-so static and more relatable, like this could be a person I know. Can't wait to see what you come out with next!
This broke my heart. Gosh, the way you write is beautiful! I love the juxtaposition of Evie's thoughts next to her demeanor, it killed me even more because it made her not-so static and more relatable, like this could be a person I know. Can't wait to see what you come out with next!
9/17/2013 c1 Guest
Holy Shit. Punch in the gut.
Holy Shit. Punch in the gut.
9/15/2013 c1 73AlysonSerenaStone
I thought this was a very beautiful story! I loved all of the bolded parts and how much emotion you put into this! Great work!
73AlysonSerenaStoneI thought this was a very beautiful story! I loved all of the bolded parts and how much emotion you put into this! Great work!
6/1/2013 c1 12Imminent Paradox
I was in the middle of working something when I got the email that you had a new story. I didn't have time to read it, but I was curious, so I thought I'd just glance at it. So I read the first paragraph... and then the next... and the next thing I know, I'm at the very end and I'm stuck in this glass case of emotion. Thanks, Curious.
But seriously, this is great. The format is so unique, and as always, the imagery you use is breathtaking. Everything about this is filled with longing and restlessness and heartbreak, and I think that's why it's so easy to become immersed in. It's the human experience, and I think everyone is familiar with these thoughts and feelings. Your writing bleeds with them.
I'm going to be honest, I cried a little. Granted, I'm the kind of girl who gets emotional when strangers get married, but still, I'd say it's an accomplishment. Once again, excellent job, and thank you for giving us yet another beautiful piece!
12Imminent ParadoxI was in the middle of working something when I got the email that you had a new story. I didn't have time to read it, but I was curious, so I thought I'd just glance at it. So I read the first paragraph... and then the next... and the next thing I know, I'm at the very end and I'm stuck in this glass case of emotion. Thanks, Curious.
But seriously, this is great. The format is so unique, and as always, the imagery you use is breathtaking. Everything about this is filled with longing and restlessness and heartbreak, and I think that's why it's so easy to become immersed in. It's the human experience, and I think everyone is familiar with these thoughts and feelings. Your writing bleeds with them.
I'm going to be honest, I cried a little. Granted, I'm the kind of girl who gets emotional when strangers get married, but still, I'd say it's an accomplishment. Once again, excellent job, and thank you for giving us yet another beautiful piece!
6/1/2013 c1 cheskey
ok i'm back and i'm alive and i'm breathing
jesus i just love the mood of your stories, your characters seem like these...idk how to describe it. they're like these wild creatures who just want...more, and i'm like wow i feel you bro. and your descriptive passages /oh my god/ can i just tell you that sometimes i can't breathe because
" and feeling very small picturing all the galaxies and and satellites and jet-planes and ships and forgotten red balloons seeping helium over the sea"
" and sometimes it is the pacific that i dream of and other times it is the atlantic all grey and muted and sad-beautiful, but always, there is heat there is light, there is laughter and wakefulness and horizons and the sting of salt on my cracked lips when i wake up"
" i wake up and all the atoms in my being are electrified and my lungs are sore and my palms are achy with yearning"
there's tons more but i cant go on because i might cry
there's really nothing i can tell you to improve because your stories are like idk abstract art, and no one criticizes abstract art because i mean i can like feel the amazing just wafting off the thing, but i don't exactly understand it. i don't know maybe i couldn't read i tproperly through the tears. someday i'll calm down and be able to give you a proper rEVIEW BUT JUST LEAVE ME IN MY CORNER FOR NOW AS I WEEP MYSELF A RIVER
have you ever thought about publishing your stories? i mean, like, officially? you could have a book full of short stories, or tackle a long story again (I MEAN MAYBE WAS PERFECT UNTIL YOU JUST TOOK IT OFF AND DESTROYED MY SOUL AND), because your writing seriously is really, really good. i mean sometimes i read these trashy young adult romance novels and im like thIs iS PUBLIshED anD curiOUScontRADIctION iS STiLL goNE frOM thE FACE OF THE EARTH WHAT IS THE POINT OF LIVING ANYMORE. but you're back and i'm fangirling like there's no tomorrow
oh i think i just spilled my guts all over this "review", love me bro. love me.
ok i'm back and i'm alive and i'm breathing
jesus i just love the mood of your stories, your characters seem like these...idk how to describe it. they're like these wild creatures who just want...more, and i'm like wow i feel you bro. and your descriptive passages /oh my god/ can i just tell you that sometimes i can't breathe because
" and feeling very small picturing all the galaxies and and satellites and jet-planes and ships and forgotten red balloons seeping helium over the sea"
" and sometimes it is the pacific that i dream of and other times it is the atlantic all grey and muted and sad-beautiful, but always, there is heat there is light, there is laughter and wakefulness and horizons and the sting of salt on my cracked lips when i wake up"
" i wake up and all the atoms in my being are electrified and my lungs are sore and my palms are achy with yearning"
there's tons more but i cant go on because i might cry
there's really nothing i can tell you to improve because your stories are like idk abstract art, and no one criticizes abstract art because i mean i can like feel the amazing just wafting off the thing, but i don't exactly understand it. i don't know maybe i couldn't read i tproperly through the tears. someday i'll calm down and be able to give you a proper rEVIEW BUT JUST LEAVE ME IN MY CORNER FOR NOW AS I WEEP MYSELF A RIVER
have you ever thought about publishing your stories? i mean, like, officially? you could have a book full of short stories, or tackle a long story again (I MEAN MAYBE WAS PERFECT UNTIL YOU JUST TOOK IT OFF AND DESTROYED MY SOUL AND), because your writing seriously is really, really good. i mean sometimes i read these trashy young adult romance novels and im like thIs iS PUBLIshED anD curiOUScontRADIctION iS STiLL goNE frOM thE FACE OF THE EARTH WHAT IS THE POINT OF LIVING ANYMORE. but you're back and i'm fangirling like there's no tomorrow
oh i think i just spilled my guts all over this "review", love me bro. love me.
6/1/2013 c1 cheskey
OH MY GOD I'M SCREAMING I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR WRITING FROM YOU FOREVER
THIS IS PERFECT I SWEAR TO GOD 'AS;DLKAS;DLKFLAKSLDKFL
okay sorry i'm going to read it 20 more times and then come back to give you "constructive criticism"
just kidding i suck but i'll try
OH MY GOD I'M SCREAMING I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR WRITING FROM YOU FOREVER
THIS IS PERFECT I SWEAR TO GOD 'AS;DLKAS;DLKFLAKSLDKFL
okay sorry i'm going to read it 20 more times and then come back to give you "constructive criticism"
just kidding i suck but i'll try
5/31/2013 c1 7SophieInPink
This is SO beautiful! I can't even find the words. Your prose is amazing.
Some of my favorite parts:
- "...he will let the ache in the gaps between his ribs be..."
- "...the green glow at the lip of the harbor and tigers and glass ladders and skylines and peter-pan smiles and savannas and railroad tracks..."
And the structure was very original. Great job! I am honestly just in awe of this. For some reason it reminds me of a Sufjan Stevens song.
7SophieInPinkThis is SO beautiful! I can't even find the words. Your prose is amazing.
Some of my favorite parts:
- "...he will let the ache in the gaps between his ribs be..."
- "...the green glow at the lip of the harbor and tigers and glass ladders and skylines and peter-pan smiles and savannas and railroad tracks..."
And the structure was very original. Great job! I am honestly just in awe of this. For some reason it reminds me of a Sufjan Stevens song.