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6/22/2013 c1 PenguinCullen06
wow love this, theres a story behind this and id love if you would turn it into a story! :D
6/20/2013 c1 1JCD5
Hey great piece! Very strong! Thanks for a good read! :-)
6/17/2013 c1 marianas
I love this. Beautiful descriptions :)
6/13/2013 c1 9Mirutsa Ilayin
Nicely written. Two notes.

Grammar check:
"How could I leave him when he needed me the most."
Technically a question.

"Go ... Hurry ... Go"
If you wanted the speaker to be ambiguous here, then this is fine. I believe it's "him" speaking, but it could also be the narrator. If you wanted it to be clear, consider clarifying. Otherwise, it's fine.

Thank you for posting this.
-mirutsa

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