for Long Way Down7/7/2013 c1 
102Cynthia Brent
Hey, this is a really good story! You write about the stuff kids really care about and you make them sound just like real people. One thing to look out for is try not to have too many people in the same chapter or the reader can't tell which is which. Also since people from all over the world read these stories, it's good to explain what city this is and what part of the USA. Great job!
102Cynthia BrentHey, this is a really good story! You write about the stuff kids really care about and you make them sound just like real people. One thing to look out for is try not to have too many people in the same chapter or the reader can't tell which is which. Also since people from all over the world read these stories, it's good to explain what city this is and what part of the USA. Great job!