for Normality7/22/2013 c1 Keladrion
Hiya,
I like it, I like the general idea etc, and I also like the lay protect, when you decide to go to a new line etc because it really works with the poem and emphasising certain words and lines and therefore the point of the poem.
I'm not superstar sure on the punctuation though, like there aren't times when I'm thinking comma and you've gone for full stop or question mark. Despite this, I'm of the opinion that punctuation in poems is pretty much optional and up to interpretation, you know, so it's really not a problem.
Oh, and I like that you only capitalised 'Normal' and 'They' etc, adding emphasis and poignancy.
Josi
Hiya,
I like it, I like the general idea etc, and I also like the lay protect, when you decide to go to a new line etc because it really works with the poem and emphasising certain words and lines and therefore the point of the poem.
I'm not superstar sure on the punctuation though, like there aren't times when I'm thinking comma and you've gone for full stop or question mark. Despite this, I'm of the opinion that punctuation in poems is pretty much optional and up to interpretation, you know, so it's really not a problem.
Oh, and I like that you only capitalised 'Normal' and 'They' etc, adding emphasis and poignancy.
Josi
7/5/2013 c1 
13Replicate
I can relate to this. All I want is to be me but everyone around me is always trying to shape me into something they want. Can't wait to read more.
13ReplicateI can relate to this. All I want is to be me but everyone around me is always trying to shape me into something they want. Can't wait to read more.
7/5/2013 c1 15the.heart.is.deceitful
Wow, this one is truly good! I can feel the struggle of the described person, wanting to be exactly the way he/she is. Hating that everyone is expecting him/her to be normal. Good job! Keep writing! :)
15the.heart.is.deceitfulWow, this one is truly good! I can feel the struggle of the described person, wanting to be exactly the way he/she is. Hating that everyone is expecting him/her to be normal. Good job! Keep writing! :)
7/5/2013 c1 3EBRIPREV23
Love it! It's so easy to relate to, because we've all felt like this sometimes. Individuality is the best thing you can have as a person, and this poem conveys that so well. Great job!
3EBRIPREV23Love it! It's so easy to relate to, because we've all felt like this sometimes. Individuality is the best thing you can have as a person, and this poem conveys that so well. Great job!
7/5/2013 c1 109so silver bright
I like this style of writing :) It's unique, and... well, I just like it. Really like it. Awesome poem :D
109so silver brightI like this style of writing :) It's unique, and... well, I just like it. Really like it. Awesome poem :D