12/27/2013 c18 Fallenpetals13
This was amazing. Their together, yeah. Plzz upload soon...

12/15/2013 c17 Nerdybird1999
Omg u cant leave me hangin like that it aint fair

12/14/2013 c1 3WritesForever
This first chapter is really good, and it's making me want to read the rest. But there's one, itsy-bitsy thing. When characters are speaking, you might want to use quotation marks instead of hyphens. It makes the speaking parts easier to hunt out and figure out when characters are talking and when they're not. Otherwise, it's really good, and I'm going to continue. (:

11/29/2013 c16 1Nerdybird1999
I love this story u are an amazing writer. But u need to create more events. It has no climax in mostof the chapters. And when u write u need "Quotations" It helps alot. And plz dont feel tht I am degrading ur storyim I love it Im jus trying to help u become a better write. Write more soon :)

11/18/2013 c2 7Olive Marie
You need to put quotation marks whenever they are speaking.

10/31/2013 c14 Guest
Very good. Can't wait for next ch.

10/26/2013 c8 2Izzy Jorgen
I hate thunder too. but that's because loud noises scare me.