for The Party Scandal10/8/2013 c2 Guest
This is a good chapter, but it could use more detail, such as when Laura suddenly is hacking a file and then next she is in the middle of a gunfight without any context for it. Also, a lengthier period of time between each POV switch would also be great. But this is an intriguing beginning to an awesome sounding book.
This is a good chapter, but it could use more detail, such as when Laura suddenly is hacking a file and then next she is in the middle of a gunfight without any context for it. Also, a lengthier period of time between each POV switch would also be great. But this is an intriguing beginning to an awesome sounding book.
7/26/2013 c2 
51Luna's Child
Another interesting chapter. Asidefrom a few gramatical errors, this was pretty good. Keep up the good work!
51Luna's ChildAnother interesting chapter. Asidefrom a few gramatical errors, this was pretty good. Keep up the good work!
7/25/2013 c1 Luna's Child
Interesting first chapter. The topic compels my curiosity, so I'll be sticking around.
Interesting first chapter. The topic compels my curiosity, so I'll be sticking around.