for In the corner of your eye11/6/2017 c10 
25Jaya Avendel
Oh my goodness. I loved what happened here and how you described it. Clare went mad; she killed him! I cannot believe she killed him! But in doing so she gave Iggy his wish. What a way to backfire the reason she killed Ash! I loved the twist.
25Jaya AvendelOh my goodness. I loved what happened here and how you described it. Clare went mad; she killed him! I cannot believe she killed him! But in doing so she gave Iggy his wish. What a way to backfire the reason she killed Ash! I loved the twist.
11/5/2017 c9 Jaya Avendel
The witch . . . the way you described her thoughts was stunning, with the twisted tree trunks and buttress roots. It was a new way of showing the mind but I liked it.
Time to feed! Iggy is having the thirst for blood! I cannot wait to see what happens next.
The witch . . . the way you described her thoughts was stunning, with the twisted tree trunks and buttress roots. It was a new way of showing the mind but I liked it.
Time to feed! Iggy is having the thirst for blood! I cannot wait to see what happens next.
11/5/2017 c8 Jaya Avendel
The angst and self torture, the antagonism of the Voice and all these sad thoughts are so wonderfully represented I feel the whirl of emotions within myself. I love the way you describe the thoughts and emotions.
The angst and self torture, the antagonism of the Voice and all these sad thoughts are so wonderfully represented I feel the whirl of emotions within myself. I love the way you describe the thoughts and emotions.
11/5/2017 c7 Jaya Avendel
Perfectly griping. I LOVED the beginning. Something about it was so sad but very well written that I could feel his emotions as he cut himself.
There is remorse in my mouth, astringently bitter . . . beautiful line. It said so much in little words.
Perfectly griping. I LOVED the beginning. Something about it was so sad but very well written that I could feel his emotions as he cut himself.
There is remorse in my mouth, astringently bitter . . . beautiful line. It said so much in little words.
11/3/2017 c6 Jaya Avendel
I loved the way this chapter started out. I liked the glimpses I got into other people's lives. I wanted to learn more about them, but it looks like brief memory flashes are all Iggy can get.
The ending . . . dangerous! I wonder if he really will kill her? The threat created perfect tension to end with.
I loved the way this chapter started out. I liked the glimpses I got into other people's lives. I wanted to learn more about them, but it looks like brief memory flashes are all Iggy can get.
The ending . . . dangerous! I wonder if he really will kill her? The threat created perfect tension to end with.
11/3/2017 c5 Jaya Avendel
Iggy likes playing dangerous games, leading the prey on. His hesitance and stammering seemed to me perfectly purposeful. You have managed to write a very good game of cat and mouse.
Iggy likes playing dangerous games, leading the prey on. His hesitance and stammering seemed to me perfectly purposeful. You have managed to write a very good game of cat and mouse.
11/3/2017 c4 Jaya Avendel
You have managed a wonderful chapter here. I am thankful for the warning.
I found the interactions here haunting but very well written, and perfect reflection of the MC's state of mind.
You have managed a wonderful chapter here. I am thankful for the warning.
I found the interactions here haunting but very well written, and perfect reflection of the MC's state of mind.
11/1/2017 c3 Jaya Avendel
I love what you have done with the voices inside the characters heads. It makes me feel a little scared at the same time I like it.
Miss Fanne gave me shivers. Long shivers. The part about her meaty darkness was frightening. What thoughts went through his mind during the scene with her. So, to answer your question, you did perfectly.
I love what you have done with the voices inside the characters heads. It makes me feel a little scared at the same time I like it.
Miss Fanne gave me shivers. Long shivers. The part about her meaty darkness was frightening. What thoughts went through his mind during the scene with her. So, to answer your question, you did perfectly.
11/1/2017 c2 Jaya Avendel
You certainly kept me on the edge of my seat with the lingering darkness and horror your words throughout the chapter contained.
It seems to be this thing is a shadow of evil that takes over a human body in order to eat, and they can switch bodies, or they have to. Either way, it is a shuddering thought to think of. The scene with the hitchhiker was the most horrific.
Either way, I love this story.
You certainly kept me on the edge of my seat with the lingering darkness and horror your words throughout the chapter contained.
It seems to be this thing is a shadow of evil that takes over a human body in order to eat, and they can switch bodies, or they have to. Either way, it is a shuddering thought to think of. The scene with the hitchhiker was the most horrific.
Either way, I love this story.
11/1/2017 c1 Jaya Avendel
Wow, this is wonderful. The inner conflict provided amusement and tension at the same time.
I am feeling chills on my spine. You have nailed creepiness and tension. Who is this Iggy? She sounds like someone to be afraid of!
Wow, this is wonderful. The inner conflict provided amusement and tension at the same time.
I am feeling chills on my spine. You have nailed creepiness and tension. Who is this Iggy? She sounds like someone to be afraid of!
8/7/2016 c10 70BradytheJust
Oh my gosh!
Well, Wozzername is a psycho, didn't see that coming...
Anyway, the fight scene was wonderfully written and it made me think of two animals fighting one another for prey. You did a wonderful job of writing the scene in a way where it was chaotic but it felt fresh, and nothing was repeated (Which I have trouble with)
I also didn't see Ash throwing himself in front of Iggy coming, and I gasped as I read how she killed him... ugh.
I loved how Iggy shed his shell and gained his power, and used it to have Ash shed his shell and come out like a dark phoenix. Wonderful!
I saw that the next chapter is a preview of another story, so I will say I felt like the story ended too abruptly for my taste. We have the battle one, Ash and Iggy have become more than human, and it ends. I would have liked to see some dialogue and maybe a romance scene to end the story and tie up everything in a nice bow, but that's just me.
Still wonderful job and I LOVED this story :)
70BradytheJustOh my gosh!
Well, Wozzername is a psycho, didn't see that coming...
Anyway, the fight scene was wonderfully written and it made me think of two animals fighting one another for prey. You did a wonderful job of writing the scene in a way where it was chaotic but it felt fresh, and nothing was repeated (Which I have trouble with)
I also didn't see Ash throwing himself in front of Iggy coming, and I gasped as I read how she killed him... ugh.
I loved how Iggy shed his shell and gained his power, and used it to have Ash shed his shell and come out like a dark phoenix. Wonderful!
I saw that the next chapter is a preview of another story, so I will say I felt like the story ended too abruptly for my taste. We have the battle one, Ash and Iggy have become more than human, and it ends. I would have liked to see some dialogue and maybe a romance scene to end the story and tie up everything in a nice bow, but that's just me.
Still wonderful job and I LOVED this story :)
8/4/2016 c9 BradytheJust
Oh, my!
I decided to read another chapter today and you tossed me a curveball! :O
So Wozzername is an obsessive smothering feather mattress... with a dark and murderous streak!
Calling her mind a forest and comparing it to trees and vines... I have to say it's really impressive how you can take something like music or a forest and use it so beautifully in these stories! Incredible!
Great chapter as always!
Oh, my!
I decided to read another chapter today and you tossed me a curveball! :O
So Wozzername is an obsessive smothering feather mattress... with a dark and murderous streak!
Calling her mind a forest and comparing it to trees and vines... I have to say it's really impressive how you can take something like music or a forest and use it so beautifully in these stories! Incredible!
Great chapter as always!
8/4/2016 c8 BradytheJust
Poor Iggy :(
You did a wonderful job with writing the scene where he goes into Ash's mind and sees only her as this beacon of light, compassion, and affection... absolutely beautiful! And the Iggy seeing that small sentence of "I want to tell him the truth"
I also liked how Iggy spoke to the readers with the last few sentences, it's a nice touch. This was an amazing chapter, and I must read more! :D
Poor Iggy :(
You did a wonderful job with writing the scene where he goes into Ash's mind and sees only her as this beacon of light, compassion, and affection... absolutely beautiful! And the Iggy seeing that small sentence of "I want to tell him the truth"
I also liked how Iggy spoke to the readers with the last few sentences, it's a nice touch. This was an amazing chapter, and I must read more! :D
8/3/2016 c7 BradytheJust
I'm not sure, I don't read many horror stories, but you know I love happy endings! :D
I really liked how you had Ash's dream/nightmare written out with plenty of musical notes and comparisons. As a musician myself, I appreciated it and it helped with imagining the scene.
I really feel bad for Iggy, he's gorged himself but the wonderful food's taste has died in his mouth :(
I'm not sure, I don't read many horror stories, but you know I love happy endings! :D
I really liked how you had Ash's dream/nightmare written out with plenty of musical notes and comparisons. As a musician myself, I appreciated it and it helped with imagining the scene.
I really feel bad for Iggy, he's gorged himself but the wonderful food's taste has died in his mouth :(
8/2/2016 c6 BradytheJust
Is it bad that I want Ash and Wozzername to be together? :)
You did a wonderful job describing the scene where they first met, and the girl is a "Farmer's market of wholesome goodness" Is she still available? (Because my hormones might be taking over, lol :)
I also liked how Iggy (or the being inhabiting him) was able to sift through all those memories of other people... you did just enough to make me want to read their stories as well! Amazing chapter!
Is it bad that I want Ash and Wozzername to be together? :)
You did a wonderful job describing the scene where they first met, and the girl is a "Farmer's market of wholesome goodness" Is she still available? (Because my hormones might be taking over, lol :)
I also liked how Iggy (or the being inhabiting him) was able to sift through all those memories of other people... you did just enough to make me want to read their stories as well! Amazing chapter!