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8/4/2013 c1 6Ed Harley
A great idea and an interesting take on a robotic mind. I noticed a couple repeated mistakes: 1) I think you meant sentient not sapien. 2) It's means it is- so the robot's hand would be its hand.
Another thing that disrupts the story is too much detail. The narration about the various parts of the robot thinking independently could be removed.

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