for Rose Red12/30/2020 c22 Liane Kennedy
Great story! Thanks!
Great story! Thanks!
11/4/2020 c18 CovertEyes
In the 3rd paragraph after the first break, you refer to a Zylander. Is that supposed to be Zaphier?
In the 3rd paragraph after the first break, you refer to a Zylander. Is that supposed to be Zaphier?
11/1/2017 c9 
13JDFly
Quite a small world coincidence with the model, but a writer needs an occasional coincidence to make an interesting story.
13JDFlyQuite a small world coincidence with the model, but a writer needs an occasional coincidence to make an interesting story.
10/25/2017 c3 JDFly
This story is way, way out there, farther than I usually go, but it's interesting and humorous, so I'm going.
This story is way, way out there, farther than I usually go, but it's interesting and humorous, so I'm going.
7/6/2015 c22 2Luti Faube
Hi, I just reread all of this today, and I really have to say that I loved everything about the story, so please don't ever take it down. The whole plotline is so orignal and creative, and i think the level of thought you put into the science of ruptors and MTN is amazing, as is the whole idea of buying a girl for finctions. It really adds to the story, and i think you should get more credit. I loved how things from the start and end tied together, like the power sander.
I adore your writing style, it's descriptive but not overly so, everything is clear and easy to absorb and imagine. Each character has their own unique personality and that comes across clearly, and they're all interesting and believable. I just loved reading it, it wasn't overly dramatic or overly anything, it had the right amount of drama and romance.
I really wanna learn a thing or two about writing from you, i hope you write more and i'm gonna check out your bio. Stay awesome.
2Luti FaubeHi, I just reread all of this today, and I really have to say that I loved everything about the story, so please don't ever take it down. The whole plotline is so orignal and creative, and i think the level of thought you put into the science of ruptors and MTN is amazing, as is the whole idea of buying a girl for finctions. It really adds to the story, and i think you should get more credit. I loved how things from the start and end tied together, like the power sander.
I adore your writing style, it's descriptive but not overly so, everything is clear and easy to absorb and imagine. Each character has their own unique personality and that comes across clearly, and they're all interesting and believable. I just loved reading it, it wasn't overly dramatic or overly anything, it had the right amount of drama and romance.
I really wanna learn a thing or two about writing from you, i hope you write more and i'm gonna check out your bio. Stay awesome.
6/2/2015 c22 Guest
This is my favorite romance on fictionpress so far! Just wanted to tell you that this is an interesting read and I like the relationship between Harrison and Paige! Plus, I like your writing style and how it read fluidly (to me, at least). Anyways, this is a good story! Thanks for sharing!
This is my favorite romance on fictionpress so far! Just wanted to tell you that this is an interesting read and I like the relationship between Harrison and Paige! Plus, I like your writing style and how it read fluidly (to me, at least). Anyways, this is a good story! Thanks for sharing!
5/14/2014 c22 John Valentine
I have nothing insightful to say in my review other than great story. The whole bit with the power sander though out the story was enduring as well.
I have nothing insightful to say in my review other than great story. The whole bit with the power sander though out the story was enduring as well.
4/26/2014 c22 Anon
Brillant! I loved the twists and turns of the plot, and I liked how the characters were not the same stereotypes either.
Brillant! I loved the twists and turns of the plot, and I liked how the characters were not the same stereotypes either.
4/23/2014 c22 9JoleneMarselis
Loved it, it's an idea that has always fascinated me andit's well written with a good dosis of humor in it. Was Zaphir inspired by Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy Zaphod Beetlebrox by chance? I kept envisioning Sam Rockwell like he played him in the movie. There was one thing that I really missed at the end though and that was the wedding night or... You entered it as an romantic story and the entire story they are dancing around each failing to make a connection with eachother. For the final the to just have them married and a kiss.. It's not enough I tell you! :p I wanna bask in the afterglow if even just a little. That doesn't mean writing a full blown sex scene if that's not your style ( though I wouldn't object if you would :)) but a scene that shows them ... connecting and give us readers a bit of a chance to enjoy the afterglow a little... like for instance a wedding night scene. Right now it seems to end rather abruptly. Don't lose the sander though,it was the perfect closer!
9JoleneMarselisLoved it, it's an idea that has always fascinated me andit's well written with a good dosis of humor in it. Was Zaphir inspired by Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy Zaphod Beetlebrox by chance? I kept envisioning Sam Rockwell like he played him in the movie. There was one thing that I really missed at the end though and that was the wedding night or... You entered it as an romantic story and the entire story they are dancing around each failing to make a connection with eachother. For the final the to just have them married and a kiss.. It's not enough I tell you! :p I wanna bask in the afterglow if even just a little. That doesn't mean writing a full blown sex scene if that's not your style ( though I wouldn't object if you would :)) but a scene that shows them ... connecting and give us readers a bit of a chance to enjoy the afterglow a little... like for instance a wedding night scene. Right now it seems to end rather abruptly. Don't lose the sander though,it was the perfect closer!
4/22/2014 c22 smrae
Can't believe this story is over! Congratulations on finishing an awesome story that was different and exciting. Kept me on the edge of my seat! Sorry to say goodbye to these characters but I'm definitely excited to read more of your work.
Can't believe this story is over! Congratulations on finishing an awesome story that was different and exciting. Kept me on the edge of my seat! Sorry to say goodbye to these characters but I'm definitely excited to read more of your work.
4/19/2014 c22 Guest
Awwww! :) This is a great ending! Loved this story! I'll definitely check out your new one.
Awwww! :) This is a great ending! Loved this story! I'll definitely check out your new one.
4/18/2014 c22 2SouthernCasual
I'm sad that it's over, but I absolutely loved it! Great job! Also, you're suchba talented writer. It was refreshing to read a story on here without a bunch of typos and lame plot twists. I can't wait for your next story!
2SouthernCasualI'm sad that it's over, but I absolutely loved it! Great job! Also, you're suchba talented writer. It was refreshing to read a story on here without a bunch of typos and lame plot twists. I can't wait for your next story!
4/18/2014 c22 6Deeper than Fathomless
I am so behind! This term has been really keeping me busy, but I thought you really deserved a review for being a good author.
I love the ending! I think this chapter is my overall favorite because you solved all the issues as if it were a regular story with a good plot. It wasn't too focused on the cheesy romance part.
I can't believe it ended!
The last few lines made me smile! I re-read, "May our years together be bright and... smooth," and was so confused. What could possible make a relationship smooth? However, I am sure a power sander would. lol
I also liked how they were married in their work clothes instead of traditional wedding attire. It's so non-traditional; I love it! ;D
And I love how you found the cause and the cure for the diseases (you created), and the consequences if they person is injected with the cure. You never swayed from your true story line, which makes you a great writer.
Well done,
Deeper than Fathomless
6Deeper than FathomlessI am so behind! This term has been really keeping me busy, but I thought you really deserved a review for being a good author.
I love the ending! I think this chapter is my overall favorite because you solved all the issues as if it were a regular story with a good plot. It wasn't too focused on the cheesy romance part.
I can't believe it ended!
The last few lines made me smile! I re-read, "May our years together be bright and... smooth," and was so confused. What could possible make a relationship smooth? However, I am sure a power sander would. lol
I also liked how they were married in their work clothes instead of traditional wedding attire. It's so non-traditional; I love it! ;D
And I love how you found the cause and the cure for the diseases (you created), and the consequences if they person is injected with the cure. You never swayed from your true story line, which makes you a great writer.
Well done,
Deeper than Fathomless
4/16/2014 c21 1Nathaniel G
Wait, wait, wait. Just one more chapter?! For goodness' sake, I just read this and it's already ending? That really sucks. Well, you got another follower here– love the story but it's really to short in my opinion. I would've liked it if the story went on for a little bit more but if you tie the story up nicely I wouldn't mind that it's going to be the last chapter. Good job and see you!
1Nathaniel GWait, wait, wait. Just one more chapter?! For goodness' sake, I just read this and it's already ending? That really sucks. Well, you got another follower here– love the story but it's really to short in my opinion. I would've liked it if the story went on for a little bit more but if you tie the story up nicely I wouldn't mind that it's going to be the last chapter. Good job and see you!