for Rose Red3/2/2014 c3 Atomic Works
It's illegal to eat beef. NO!
(runs around in a panic attack)
Oh god the horror, what are Jewish people suppose to eat?!
But besides this one nightmarish detail great story, very entertaining. I'll be sure to keep reading.
It's illegal to eat beef. NO!
(runs around in a panic attack)
Oh god the horror, what are Jewish people suppose to eat?!
But besides this one nightmarish detail great story, very entertaining. I'll be sure to keep reading.
3/2/2014 c9 Abbey
Towards the end you began a sentence with, "It was about was..." It'd make more sense to add a 'what' at the start or to take out the second 'was.'
And I love stories with the blanket scenario (granted that the characters are those couples I ship).
Towards the end you began a sentence with, "It was about was..." It'd make more sense to add a 'what' at the start or to take out the second 'was.'
And I love stories with the blanket scenario (granted that the characters are those couples I ship).
3/2/2014 c6 Abbey
The way you separated the renovation project into "takes" was pretty creative. The interaction between Harrison and Paige was adorable here.
The way you separated the renovation project into "takes" was pretty creative. The interaction between Harrison and Paige was adorable here.
3/2/2014 c5 Abbey
I mean you leave out enough details for us to be wanting more instead of feeling confused. Although, I do wonder how women became products in the future. Putting that aside, this is a fantastic read.
I mean you leave out enough details for us to be wanting more instead of feeling confused. Although, I do wonder how women became products in the future. Putting that aside, this is a fantastic read.
3/2/2014 c5 Abbey
Your story has an engaging plot, great characters (I even like Keziah a bit), and hardly any grammatical errors. You leave out enough for us to be wanting more.
Your story has an engaging plot, great characters (I even like Keziah a bit), and hardly any grammatical errors. You leave out enough for us to be wanting more.
2/28/2014 c16 alex j
Still my fave!
Still my fave!
2/22/2014 c15 
6Deeper than Fathomless
I did read this chapter ages ago, but I finally got the time to review! You're welcome! ;D
Zaphier is absolutely evil - the story on Paige makes me weary of his true intentions. He obviously needs someone to scope our Harrison's place, and Paige is perfect person for the job, but if she finds nothing what will Zaphier do with her? I don't think this plan will work out as smoothly as Osric stated, even if he's the genius who has pieced together Zaphier's plan. He trusting in Zaphier to do the right thing; an evil man won't.
Osric is right: they might get violent, but will violence be preferred in a case like this? Harrison can't sell Paige, but Narrissa's safety is at risk as well. He and Paige, because she does deserve a say, have to decided whether they are willing to risk it all.
Waiting for the next update,
Deeper than Fathomless
PS: You're plot is dope, man. XD It's got me on edge.
6Deeper than FathomlessI did read this chapter ages ago, but I finally got the time to review! You're welcome! ;D
Zaphier is absolutely evil - the story on Paige makes me weary of his true intentions. He obviously needs someone to scope our Harrison's place, and Paige is perfect person for the job, but if she finds nothing what will Zaphier do with her? I don't think this plan will work out as smoothly as Osric stated, even if he's the genius who has pieced together Zaphier's plan. He trusting in Zaphier to do the right thing; an evil man won't.
Osric is right: they might get violent, but will violence be preferred in a case like this? Harrison can't sell Paige, but Narrissa's safety is at risk as well. He and Paige, because she does deserve a say, have to decided whether they are willing to risk it all.
Waiting for the next update,
Deeper than Fathomless
PS: You're plot is dope, man. XD It's got me on edge.
2/21/2014 c15 Dundundunnnn
Loved. This. CHAPTER!
I love that this story is going somewhere exciting. I love Harrison, I love Paige... I just love it, okay? I've written stuff before, so I know that authors like detailed reviews, but... I don't know what else to say other than this story is AMAZING.
Loved. This. CHAPTER!
I love that this story is going somewhere exciting. I love Harrison, I love Paige... I just love it, okay? I've written stuff before, so I know that authors like detailed reviews, but... I don't know what else to say other than this story is AMAZING.
2/20/2014 c15 smrae
Great update! Seems like they are in deep! All they want is a simple life and they can't even get that! Crazy! Feel better soon! Looking forward to the update :)
Great update! Seems like they are in deep! All they want is a simple life and they can't even get that! Crazy! Feel better soon! Looking forward to the update :)
2/20/2014 c15 Aggiesis88
Still love this story! Def. One of my faves
Still love this story! Def. One of my faves
2/19/2014 c14 smrae
Great chapter! That last bit with Harrison was awesome so sweet and real. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Great chapter! That last bit with Harrison was awesome so sweet and real. Looking forward to the next chapter!
2/15/2014 c14 Ladedadeda
WHY IS HARRISON SO SWEET? Ahh, I love him :)
I like that the story is starting to focus on what happened to Paige. I'm verrrry eager to see what comes next.
WHY IS HARRISON SO SWEET? Ahh, I love him :)
I like that the story is starting to focus on what happened to Paige. I'm verrrry eager to see what comes next.
2/13/2014 c14 Deeper than Fathomless
I can't stand waiting (even as little as seven days) for another chapter. I just want to know what happens next! ;)
I am glad they both cleared things up, and I am wondering how they both will solve this issue. Paige is right: Harrison might "love" her because she's the only woman around, but she's a good woman. Good women are a diamond in the rough. Even if Harrison does give Paige her rights over herself, will it solve Harrison's issue? She will have the freedom to choose, but there is no way to prove he loves her, you know?
Such a good plot!
DTF
I can't stand waiting (even as little as seven days) for another chapter. I just want to know what happens next! ;)
I am glad they both cleared things up, and I am wondering how they both will solve this issue. Paige is right: Harrison might "love" her because she's the only woman around, but she's a good woman. Good women are a diamond in the rough. Even if Harrison does give Paige her rights over herself, will it solve Harrison's issue? She will have the freedom to choose, but there is no way to prove he loves her, you know?
Such a good plot!
DTF