for Just a Tool10/24/2013 c3 
4Veronica Fay
For some reason, I had thought Xi died, I'm glad that's not the case! I really like how you give information about Tools and this world, but still leave out much to led to a good 'confusion' leading me to need to read more!
4Veronica FayFor some reason, I had thought Xi died, I'm glad that's not the case! I really like how you give information about Tools and this world, but still leave out much to led to a good 'confusion' leading me to need to read more!
10/18/2013 c1 Veronica Fay
Hi!
This was an interesting start! Is each line break, a different time period? like a flashback then present? I like how you always have creative names and different things happening! like MuTT and Hostile! I need to find out what these are. Good job!
Hi!
This was an interesting start! Is each line break, a different time period? like a flashback then present? I like how you always have creative names and different things happening! like MuTT and Hostile! I need to find out what these are. Good job!
10/9/2013 c6 4Arethusa Cyberia
This is very interesting. I hope there’s a rebellion in the future. :) You need to go over this more closely and not rely solely on Spell Check, but I’m not seeing any blatant grammatical or structure errors.
You have just enough input from the characters so that this is not too removed from viewpoint and emotion, and the flashback and interior thought format is working. Good job! :)
4Arethusa CyberiaThis is very interesting. I hope there’s a rebellion in the future. :) You need to go over this more closely and not rely solely on Spell Check, but I’m not seeing any blatant grammatical or structure errors.
You have just enough input from the characters so that this is not too removed from viewpoint and emotion, and the flashback and interior thought format is working. Good job! :)