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10/16/2013 c2 8Jax Creation
Eeh, I've always wanted to create characters like Amagiri and Rin. They're so complex and well-developed despite having just been introduced. Being able to establish their personalities so early on is brilliant :3 And as I said last chapter they're very easy for someone like me to relate to.

Not entirely sure what to expect from here on, but I'm sure I'll enjoy whatever comes next.
10/16/2013 c1 Jax Creation
Very nice story; I've been waiting to read something like this. It reminds me of "The Perks of Being a Wallflower". Narration is lovely; I can relate very well to Amagiri-kun and his thoughts. Introverts unite -w-b

I'm looking forward to meeting the other members of the club and seeing how their relationships function.

In terms of constructive critique, the biggest thing that jumps out at me is the inconsistency with tenses. Majority of the narration is in past tense, however, lines that are direct thought and opinion are in present tense. For a first-person story like this, one that has a lot of contemplation by the MC, I think that present tense is much better and more immersing, but naturally it has some draw-backs too, especially as it's not as commonly used in novels as past tense.

Anyway, I'll be following this one. Best of luck :3
10/15/2013 c2 7Razorine
Another evocative chapter yet again. Nice to see more from Shizuki and Amagiri, especially how they talk. Your story is concise, and each word feels needed. Also, another reason I like this is because of the concept. I'm a fan of philosophy, so the more you add the more I'll enjoy this x3

It's nice that you delved into Shizuki's case. This gives us a peek into her philosophy, and her relationship with Amagiri and others. It was definitely something I pondered from the first chapter, so kudos.

I'm curious, really. Both Amagiri and Shizuki seem to be studious people, and I'm wondering if you've got an optimistic insomniac as a member of the Social Research Club. Just to give things friction, because friction equals interest.

Nevertheless, I'm excited to see how you'll play this out ;D

Once again, first POV for the win! And of course, I await the next chapter! *fanfare plays in the background*
10/13/2013 c2 10DappledKarma
I sometimes think like Rin; that people shouldn't be judged at all by their physical appearance. Of course, as Amagiri says, that is simply impossible. (I still make attempts to reject it at times though!) The depths of these characters are unusually deep in such a short word amount. I hope to see more members of the Social Research Club and their thought processes, especially if they're as realistic as the ones introduced already. Definitely adding to my favorites.
10/13/2013 c1 7Razorine
Ah, I stumbled upon this while mindlessly scrolling down the Manga section. Honestly, I don't know why I didn't stumble upon this earlier x3

I see why first person POV works well here- you can do wonders with it emotionally and mentally. Third person deep POV does too, but I prefer the former x3

When I read a story, I have to believe the characters straightaway. Yours are not cliche, and are actually likeable. I myself like Amagiri, and actually tolerate Shizuki as opposed to other female characters.

Also, the concept of your story is common, but you've ironed it out to be something more. A club? Fufufu! I always like clubs, and I always like delving into the stories of a each club member. It's just me, but oh well. That's my prediction for this story.

Really, your introduction caught me right away. Namely the first sentence (even if I don't know what it means... ehe).

I've no idea why you're unweighted when you can write with this prose and this wording (okay, that was a pun on your alias- sorry xP). I'm following and favoriting this! And expect another review from me if I'm bothered to. I'm not very consistent with review-giving ;F

Looking forward to seeing more. The Case of Shizuki Rin? Yes, please! ;D
10/9/2013 c1 10DappledKarma
Wow. That was mellow. Are you continuing this?

It's rare for me to give my complete attention to stories, and rarer to feel like I can relate to what's going on inside of the protagonist's head. Amagiri has an interesting world view. Hope to see more of him, and Rin too. (I picture Rin Tohsaka whenever I see her name, lol.)
9/12/2013 c1 12NeoMiniTails
Wow, I really like this first chapter! And the name of this story fits the tone very much! Your narrative is very strong and puts me into the mental state of your protagonist. It's not very easily done.

This is the second story that I read today that reminds me of My Teen Romantic Comedy SNAFU, but I have a feeling that this story will have the beauty and grace of Fruits Basket. I'm very interested in your characters and how they'll develop.

I would love to see this on printed form.

Anyways, update soon!

- Neo

Can you read my story "Eternal Dreams: The Legend of the Miracle Knights?"
9/12/2013 c1 xxxyx
Hm, so going to be a less light-hearted read, eh? Here goes.
'As for battles, explosions, and the like...Why bother even entertaining those impossible ideas?' - lol maybe, The Eternal Tale?
Hm, first person POV.
Philosophical and reflective narration. It's a slow, yet flowing start. Had to admit, being able to maneuver in style compared to the Eternal Tale is a show of versatility as an author.
So far so good. The real challenge is actually continuing the story. Good luck!
9/10/2013 c1 4Lolitroy
Ahaha, I've been wanting to read a story like this for a while :D

I really liked the introduction. While it struck me as monotone as first, I was caught by the melancholic type of narration and lingering theme behind it. The permise sounds very promising as well, totally suits my tastes, because what FP lacks is a story like this, self-discovery adn all that stuff without being overly cheesy and teen-angsty.

Can't wait for the next udate. Literally. It's just the first chapter and I'm already very interested... and that doesn't happen often.

Awesome last line as well.

As for constructive criticism, I will help as next chapter comes ;)
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